TOffice Love
MLP: FiM
Romance
Dark
Slice of Life
Anonymous leaves Ponyville to pursue a quiet office job in Manehattan. While he finds the possibility of new love in his future, he finds that his past from Ponyville isn't willing to give him up so easily.
Suicide / Self Harm
Second Person
Human
Alt. Universe
Fluttershy
OC
Anon
Flutterpriest · 73k words · 827 55 · 14k views

The 5 year break is over · 4:20am Feb 20th, 2023

Anonymous leaves Ponyville to pursue a quiet office job in Manehattan. While he finds the possibility of new love in his future, he finds that his past from Ponyville isn't willing to give him up so easily.

Flutterpriest · 73k words · 827 55 · 14k views

Three chapters left to write.

Re-reading through the first 8 chapters of Office Love was a hell of a chore, but I'm happy I did so that I could amend the tracks and push us back in the right direction.

Three big pieces of plot get resolved in this chapter. And frankly, I bet you it feels rushed. Maybe it's coming from a lack of passion or maybe its coming from a place where I'm rusty on how to properly write a story.

But frankly reading the early chapters felt like a struggle. And how much of it was just padded filler versus actually advancing the plot was a touch frustrating. Sure I maybe did a decent job at illustrating the environment, but some of the dialogue felt... well. hollow.

I hope this new chapter brings back the stakes, and can re-grab yall's attention. As I said. there's only three chapters left. And I want to keep them concise and focused. Which means I don't think I need to use "flashbacks" in order to resolve plot threads that I either thought I would address in a longer form story, or simply forgot to include.

Writing in serial and releasing in chunks is a mistake. I'm happy i've grown enough as a writer to look back and see my growth and what I would do differently.

Tense changes are still probably terrible in the new chapter though

also it was written on a mac so hopefully it isn't riddled with stupid typos

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