Ineffectual.
That's what I'd call this place. Utterly ineffectual.
It serves it's purpose well enough, I suppose. She seems to like it here, and the scanners didn't detect any dangerous creatures in the vicinity. Except for that forest nearby. I might have to take a look into that soon. There might be some interesting specimens I can gather.
I've been here for a while now. I'm not really sure what to do next. I'm not even sure why this confounded contraption had brought us here in the first place. And what's worse is I can't get it to start back up! Truly, a stubborn thing! It must be the core again. I don't know why, but the system has been very faulty as of late. The Chameleon Circuit, in particular has been malfunctioning. How inconvenient..
And of all the places to wind up. The intellectual peak of which I can gain here is still primitive to say the least, and the natives are no more of a promise than that farmer girl the child seems to be fond of. If I have to eat one more apple, I assure her that I won't eat another after we leave. How ever she convinced the locals to simply let her trot off with a bushel is almost inconceivable. I don't suppose she stole, could she? No.. it would be unlike her.
I must find a way to repair the ship. I must! But these books are hardly of any use. Not to mention the supposed application of half of these spells are all muttled with all sorts of pretentious nonsense. If only I had a horn, I'd show these foals a thing or two..
Such a shame that one is so wasted on her. All the potential, with very little guidance. If it were my concern, I would like to have a talk with her instructor. She's obviously been trained, of that much is clear. But leaving it half-way. Irresponsible! Extraordinarily irresponsible.
Perhaps she can assist me?
No no no no, that's out of the question! We're already in dangerous waters as it is. We've maintained a credible degree of anonymity so far, and I intend to keep it. Entrusting our lives to a complete stranger... I'm surprised I even considered it.
Still, if she could manage something like this: A library in a tree... astonishing.
And the tree seems to be intact. Why... it's as if the tree itself is allowing her to live inside of it...
'Moderated Sentience'
Fascinating, very fascinating. I wonder if I can apply that sort of magic with the core.
But how?
I love me a good doctor who crossover, this has potential. Just one tiny suggestion, that really just sticks out to me. Could you please not bold the speech? It gets a bit distracting.
2460442 I agree with what they say, also I like where this is going, keep up the good work
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Will do.
Still getting used to FimFic. I'm used to bolding speech text. Cuz it makes it easier to distinguish it from the rest of the text.
Editing nao
Interesting concept... Doctor who. You are doing it well so far! But I have just one question - are young going to focus the story on the first (or original series) doctors? I ask because I have never seen those episodes so I can't really relate. Keep writing though!
"the 1st Doctor, played by William Hartnell"
You beauty! You bloody beauty!
I'm going to fave this story into the ground
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I'm planning to feature various doctors throughout the story. Don't worry though, I'll be sure to explain the references I use in the author's notes so that you all can relate. And of course, I'll be featuring the newer doctors too. Like 10th, since we all know there can't be a Dr. Who fic without Davey Wavey
2460484 A tip is to write dialogue with "" <--those little bastards and writing thoughts in italics without the little bastards.
(I forgot their name, that's why I call them little bastards)
Small note: Italics in comments are broken...
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I believe they're called quotation marks :)
And thanks for the tip. Will edit that as well.
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" Like 10th, since we all know there can't be a Dr. Who fic without Davey Wavey "
*favourites story*
Wow, a fic with the first Doctor. I hope when Twilight finds him that he's regenerated. I can't stand the firt one, any of the others are fine, but not him. Also if he was there from 3pm to midnight everyday for a month, why didn't Pinkie just COME INTO THE LIBRARY! Then she could have met him. Just saying.
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Truth is, since the Doc has been in town for over a month, inside or outside the library, I think anyone would have noticed him. The mystery is that no one has seen him. Ever. Except for Twilight for some reason.
I'll reveal why this is so, soon
Doctor No# 1
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FOUND!
Okay, but who to have as the Susan expy? Scootaloo?
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Still thinking about that
Caught my attention for not looking like it'll be your average run-of-the-mill Doctor Whooves tale.
Unless you're doing something particularly creative with the trope, NEVER START A STORY BY DESCRIBING THE WEATHER FOLLOWED BY THE SETTING. It is the instant warning to the reader that this is written by an amateur writer.
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But what of Eleven? He's good too!
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I am an amateur writer. I have no reason to pretend that I'm not. But thanks for the advice nonetheless.
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Although I'm not a big fan of Smith, I'll see if I can include him too :)
First Doctor is such a troll. He is quite literally going to drive Twilight up the wall.
I don't think they had perception filters in the early series, so it can't be that...
You seem to have captured the spirit of Twilight and Pinkie's relationship, better than I have so far in my stories. I really want to see how Doctor #1 interacts with Pinkie. I can imagine how he will deal with Twilight, but I'm getting flashbacks to Cranky Doodle Donkey when I think of Doctor #1 and Pinkie.
Keep it up!
Minor correction:
Alright, I have now satisfied my obsessive compulsive side.
I sense much potential in this story, and shall be following with interest.
2462595 but 11 is fun, and slightly depressing but still fun
If you intend to carve through all of the Doctors... I am quite eager to see how you intend to portray Ecleston, though he is my least favorite of the new series, and Tennant, who is very much my favorite of all the Doctors. I am firmly convinced that both will make quite entertaining ponies. Smith... I see Smith being nearly impossible to convert well to pony form. Regardless, he is still quite the entertaining character. He's effectively Captain Jack Sparrow crossed with Dirk Pitt, further crossed with Indiana Jones, and even further crossed with McGuyver, in space. There may be even a little of Sherlock Holmes in there too...
the first doctor more of just a citizen of the universe
Sure, I love Doctor Who and all, but this wasn't very good.