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I'm lost?
and what's with the dick potion? It makes no sense man?!
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yeah, this is kinda 'out in left feild' i know, but it will make sense later, just for context, the interlude starts the morning of hoyt's arrival, before it happens
I've read worse HiE story for sure.
But I don't like this one, something bother me from the start but not exactly sure what.
You avoided some bad things ( the MC is not a US marine poping up in Everfree fully geared to kill some Manticore and save RD ), but still the story is pretty standard for the first 3 chapters.
You've been told it, but the MC don't struggle at anything, is insta-friend ( and match-maker at chapter 3, so only a few hours after being transported to Equestria ... ) with the Mane 6, we know from the start he's going to fuck Twilight ( because you're way too obvious ), don't care about being in a NEW world with a SENTIENT and TALKING species and he find them cute and attractive from the start when he know about horses from home.
Twilight take is Ukulele because she think it may be dangerous, but show him the town, make him eat and talk to other ponies ? What is the reasonement behind this ?
I've not read past chapter 3, because so far after 10k words this story bother me too much.
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i know what you're getting at, the reaction being off especially, to give you the short, least spoilery explanation, i start to address that at the end of chapter 7, and the explanation is still incoming, but there is a reason. may have to write a prelude later to make this more clear, but i have something like that in the interlude i just did, which may get redone later and made into a prelude. if you seriously don't like it though, there are always huge piles of other fics to read
what just happened there? And it seems they expect him to do something like detonate a few nukes in Equestria
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more of what's going on there will be revealed later, that bit was kinda meant to leave people a bit confused/thinking, and the nuclear option just may be on the table... hmm sounds like a plan to me
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I was already impatient for more chapters and this didn't reduce that desire.
My condition has merely been exacerbated!
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well this is better than a longer wait for another chapter, right? did this because i was getting stuck on starting the next one, which i am past now, so just be patient, surely there are other updated stories for you in the meantime
2628580 im with you i hit the writers block bad with my story LOL
I LOST IT ALL WHEN SHE SAID "DICK" XD XD HAHAHA OMG I almost fell out the chair XD
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good to hear lol, i had a moment of inspiration for those lines, but zecora won't be a common appearance in my writing, so don't get your hopes too high
2655500 Understandable. Still funny though...
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I have no idea what that comment means...
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hmm, interesting
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thank you all for the kind words, next chapter is already a little more than half done, and shouldn't take near so painfully long to get out. second or third chapter of this second arch should finally put purpose behind those tags that sit next to 'incomplete'
And now the seventh potion and Luna's reaction to it makes much more sense. How very...thoughtful.
I liked this we get to see what happened before he got there. I can't wait to see what happens between them all next and to them all next.