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Every time I see the name Carrot Top, or Golden Harvest, I think of Beyond Her Garden, specifically teh animation version.
Thats a Big root vegetable.
If there are races that have already become extinct, and Starlights banned from scroll work, then might Twilight be able to come up with something like the old Type 40, given the Tree Of Harmony, and Crystal Empire, and get examples from before they went extinct, then let them have space to live where they cant be affected by the machinations of the Realms until he can build Juraasic Pork Island etc?
Chapters in my modest liking, however Wolf. I have to say one thing, then you do it: I find in your story that only the nobility, richs in general, you describe it as sons of bitches, understandable. However, you also have to take into consideration that ordinary people are, too. therefore, I find it very, very, very strange that only the nobility in general insults Raymond and his offspring.
(*Coff, coff* Does it have something to do with some things Luna said in your second Halloween chapter years ago about what Luna would do with certain toys. and as a result all the ponies feel like they're in a supposed dictatorship? *coff, coff*)
But ordinary people don't do it!!, take these words of mine into consideration. Because until now and I fear in future chapters it will be like this. You are exploiting too many, too many stereotypes in predefined frames. and you lose this in credibility or plausible semi-realism in your story.
This is not a scathing criticism of you, before anyone, or you, thinks otherwise, but I speak from experience of writing on another similar site fanfction with co-authors or myself.
Then again, do as you please. this is just a constructive criticism that I'm giving you and that no one here has given you on this particular.
Here goes an idea for your next chapter do a story like Temptation Island