Anyways, i gotta remark that your story per-se is quite good. Even tho the characters are out of their normal personalities it works well with what you accomplished here. Some stuff seem a lil bit forced, but nothing unforgivable. At first i thought that the over reactions of twilight and spike (in the scene in which she yelled at him because of the crystals) was just a fabrication of heartstroke´s mind, because he wanted to see/hear spike suffer, but now we see how fucked up the world and its inhabitants are.
I cant tell if you managed to make this out of luck or you planned it all along, but still, quite good and entertaining to analyze.
On the other hand. OH GOD GORE, RAPE, DEATH JESUS CHRIST MY EYES HURT.
uh thanks haha. yeah chap 4 is still in progress, and I did go for that "now we see how fucked up the world is" thing, but I got lucky too. and sorry bout ur eyes.
Seems like this was left incomplete.
Anyways, i gotta remark that your story per-se is quite good. Even tho the characters are out of their normal personalities it works well with what you accomplished here. Some stuff seem a lil bit forced, but nothing unforgivable. At first i thought that the over reactions of twilight and spike (in the scene in which she yelled at him because of the crystals) was just a fabrication of heartstroke´s mind, because he wanted to see/hear spike suffer, but now we see how fucked up the world and its inhabitants are.
I cant tell if you managed to make this out of luck or you planned it all along, but still, quite good and entertaining to analyze.
On the other hand. OH GOD GORE, RAPE, DEATH JESUS CHRIST MY EYES HURT.
uh thanks haha. yeah chap 4 is still in progress, and I did go for that "now we see how fucked up the world is" thing, but I got lucky too. and sorry bout ur eyes.
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Its k. Keep up the good work
249889 Eeyup. Thank you. Just an observation, so far no one has said my story is horrid but I still get thumbed down. Weird.
Chapter 4 is done.