Story of a pony who has fallen in love with Rarity, and then becomes a stalker.
Don't worry about the momentary confusion, it all comes to closure in five more chapters.....
Feedback helps.
P.S. When this hits 1000 views I'll finish it.
What...the.... Eh? don't care about it. The last part had me there Spike might want to watch his tail. What say you Big Mac?
Eeyup
thats pretty good i suggest making them longer
What was going on in Heartstroke's head when he heard about Spike:emotibot.net/pix/1582.gif
But seriously though, you need to indent paragraphs and diary additions accordingly. It gets a little confusing sometimes when reading your story. Other than that, I look forward to reading the rest of it.
Oh... GOD! Please tell me he was dreaming! Seriously, that was some fucked up shit right there! Goddamn, and what the hell!?
Don't worry about the momentary confusion, it all comes to closure in five more chapters.....
Feedback helps.
P.S. When this hits 1000 views I'll finish it.
What...the.... Eh? don't care about it. The last part had me there Spike might want to watch his tail. What say you Big Mac?
Eeyup
thats pretty good i suggest making them longer
What was going on in Heartstroke's head when he heard about Spike:
emotibot.net/pix/1582.gif
But seriously though, you need to indent paragraphs and diary additions accordingly. It gets a little confusing sometimes when reading your story. Other than that, I look forward to reading the rest of it.
Oh... GOD! Please tell me he was dreaming!
Seriously, that was some fucked up shit right there! Goddamn, and what the hell!?