A bit fast paced, but enjoyable. Marcus' thoughts and motivations are a bit obscure, though that might be on purpose. I wonder why Fluttershy is so... Forward? Guess we'll see. All in all, a fun read, with minor complaints, most of which might simply be a matter of style. Good job. *Thumb up*
"I made out with her about seven hours after I met her" YES! The inside joke has been brought to light!
-Glassed
It's getting LOVEY-DOVEY! Excellent chapter
D'aaaawww! SO MUCH WIN! TAKE ALL MY MONEY!
cant wait for more.
A bit fast paced, but enjoyable. Marcus' thoughts and motivations are a bit obscure, though that might be on purpose. I wonder why Fluttershy is so... Forward? Guess we'll see. All in all, a fun read, with minor complaints, most of which might simply be a matter of style. Good job. *Thumb up*
"You're going to LOVE ME!" Carnally.
This story is quite interesting. I hope you will continue writing it
definitely wanting more.