In the year 2027, Millhouse; the current president of the United States has destroyed the world with industry and hate. He has removed the Bill of Rights and Earth is in chaos. That is until one faithful day changes everything.
======Viewpoint Millhouse======
I stood there at the podium ready to announce the new discovery to the people who can't use it.
"Douchebags and whores." Tons of people in the audience had rolled their eyes.
I love saying that.
"I present to you a new type of technology made by these four idiots."
I looked back and saw four frowning scientists.
Ha.
As if I cared if they were mad.
"A portal to a new world."
The portal had turned on and what I saw was stupid little peaceful world filled with sunshine and butterflies.
"Uck. Alright dumb-asses. Put on your space suits and let's destro- uh I mean explore this world."
I walked in and saw a castle built in the mountains in the distance and a village nearby.
There's life here?!
Not like I give a damn. I just want more factories.
We ran out of space on Earth.
I saw what looked like multicolored ponies prancing about in the village
"Well whoever is the caretaker of the horses here, they’re doing a horrible job."
I laughed at that but the others didn’t
"THAT WAS FUNNY! LAUGH NOW!"
They all started laughing like maniacs.
"What are you laughing about."
I love being President.
"Alright c’mon. Let's destro- uh I mean explore this place."
We started heading towards the village and there were tons of ponies everywhere.
One of them was light blue, had a horn, AND WAS HEADED STRAIGHT FOR ME!
THAT THING'S GONNA KILL ME!
I pulled out my revolver and aimed it at the light blue hostile until one of the scientist's tackled me to the ground.
"What the hell was that all about you dumb prick."
"Sir. That thing was not yet confirmed hostile."
"IT WAS HEADED STRAIGHT TOWARDS ME WITH THAT POINTY THING ON IT'S HEAD"
Then I realized the thing was in front of me.
It had stopped.
It was staring at all of us.
Then it opened it's mouth.
"Oh my goddess."
THIS THING SPEAKS ENGLISH!?
"HOLY BOLLOCKS!"
The thing jumped back in surprise.
"Hey Charlie. Hand me my tranquilizer."
Charlie had opened the case holding the gun and threw the gun at me.
The little thing spoke 3 last words before getting shot.
"What's that thing."
FWIP. Straight in the neck.
“Alright let's get this thing back in the lab.”
None of the scientists spoke a word as the light green thing was hauled onto Earth.
Then I realized something else.
I wanna know if the air there is breathable.
"Hey you."
I pointed at the moron who invented the portal.
"Get in there and test out the air. Make sure it's alright."
"But-"
"NOW."
The so called scientist rushed into the portal and took off his helmet.
"The air's fine here."
"Great. Now hurry up and help us get this alien into the lab."
I hurried into the lab with the alien carried by the scientists.
The set her up on a metal dissecting table.
"We'll dissect this thing after lunch. I'm starving."
=======Narrating=======
And with that, the poor pony was left in a dark room until a silhouetted human enters the room.
Sorry for restarting the story but MussledElk gave me some story advice and said I need to restart the story because it had a 1.6 rating and that's what turns people off but if just in case you didn't read my story before I deleted it, this part here is called the update comment. It's a comment made by the creator of the story that updates you on what's happening in the story and will always have a Pinkie smile at the end. Fluttershy will also be here say hello Fluttershy. I'm gonna let her type now (Fluttershy: ubfhewllkoi. (Me: She has hooves so it's hard for her to type. The update comment also gives you a sneak peek of the next chapter and here it is. Lyra is the light green alien and she lives. Anyways bye-bye with a Pinkie smile
Sorry it's short but it's just an introduction
Still better than Interdimensional
But...
I...
Trollfic or comedy?
149238 Maybe it's both? Your guess is as good as mine.
I'm going to shoot for trollfic
even i don't write this bad
no offence to our good colt marcosperezbromg
i htink you prettymuch stole my idea
I'm sorry, but what the hell did I just read?
I would be fine if the United States was under a dictatorship if this was set much further into the future, as there might have been the 2nd American Civil War or the beginning of World War III that might've caused this to happen (very, very small chance though), but this is way too recent. A prologue to why the US is a dictatorship would've been nice.
But as this is not too far into the future, I have to say that you have absolutely have no idea how the American Government works and how Checks and Balances come into play.
This is harsh criticism, yes, but this is just...
Use complete sentences, write paragraphs longer than a sentence, and Millhouse is not a meme.
That poor pony.
Wow...I really...this needs a ton of attention to be taken seriously, even for a (what appears to be) trollfic. I shall shoot at the errors!
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Everything's coming up Millhouse! Seriously though, this story has alot of room for improvement.
149358 Millhouse is not a meme is a meme
Your argument is invalid
>President by the name of Millhouse
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<A bad President in the year 2027 by the name of Millhouse has forced his scientists into making a portal to another world along with an immortality machine.
SEEMS LEGIT.
149307 ??? wut. I got this off my own idea. I don't even know you
Ok I will fix a few errors and set the date more into the future so I could make it more realistic. It's just that I just set it at 2027 because I don't want to be extremely old in the story. I don't want the ponies to be old either. No this is not a trollfic in any way, shape, or form. I just need a co-author. That's all
149388 SHOOT DEM ERRORS WIT A HEAVY BOLTER!
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Too late
got to nuke this entire page
I'm going to sound like a jerk when I say this, but I have an idea for a better description. It might be worse or it might be better so bear with me:
The year is 2039 and America is under a dictatorship. The tyrant's name: Milhouse. His plan: Universal Domination. In hopes to achieve this goal, Milhouse forces his science team to create a portal to another world. When the portal is activated it leads them to a place where sunshine and rainbows rein supreme.
Use it if you want to and you can make any changes to it.
152196 Gee thanks. I would like to thank everyone for constructive criticism. It helps a lot
This... this was so beautifully, delightfully insane, I can't help but love it. I mean, he introduces his audience, as the President, as 'Douchebags and whores.' Beautiful. 5 stars for insanity alone.