Twilight looked around at her friend's shocked faces.
"So, what do ya say, Twily?" Pinkie Pie piped up energetically.
"I-um-I" Twilight began.
"Hold on a second!" Rainbow dash shouted, standing upright on her bed, pointing at Pinkie. "You can't just go asking out Twilight without finding out if anypony else lo-like's her!"
"Wait, what? But, I don't like her..." Pinkie said, turning towards a open-mouthed Twilight "I love her." Pinkie said lovingly, making Twilight's mouth practically hit the floor.
Fluttershy started to cry, and ran out of the room, covering her face with her mane.
"Look what you did Pinkie!" Rainbow angrily yelled, staring bitterly into Pinkie's eyes.
"But I though I was supposed to tell the pony I love...when I...love-" Pinkie looked at Twilight, who was still in the same shocked position. "You don't love me back, do you?" Pinkie asked sadly, her frizzy mane flattening down, it's bright tint darkening.
Pinkie walked away dejectedly.
"P-Pinkie..." Was all that Twilight could manage.
Twilight looked at her remaining friends, noticing that Rarity must've left at some point.
Applejack and Rainbow looked at Twilight.
"YES!" Twilight shouted, running out of the hospital to find Pinkie.
"No..." Rainbow whispered sorrowfully, desperately reaching for the love of her life, who quickly disappeared.
Applejack felt like her heart was twisting violently in her chest. She tumbled down and covered her face with her hooves.
"What just happened?" Rainbow said, closing her tear filled eyes.
Pinkie walked home, her feelings crushed.
I guess Rainbow was right. Maybe I shouldn't express my feelings. Pinkie thought.
It'll only hurt me.
"Pinkie!" The sad mare heard from behind her. "Pinkie! wait for me!"
"Twilight?" Pinkie asked, turning around to see her favorite unicorn.
"Pinkie..." Twilight said, breathing heavily, slowing down to a stop. "I..." Pinkie put a hoof to Twilight's mouth, silencing her, and smiling through her tears.
"Twilight. Don't be sorry. I love you, and there's no way I would hold anything against you." Pinkie said, then turned around and kept on walking home.
"No, Pinkie. I-I want to be your special somepony!" Twilight didn't know why she instantly felt this way for her friend. But it just felt right...
"You what!?" Pinkie's eyes widened as her mane brightening and becoming frizzy again.
Pinkie ran back to Twilight, and hugged her tightly.
"I thought you hated me." Said Pinkie.
"Hate you? What gave you that idea?" Twilight said, hugging her new marefriend tightly.
"I love you Twilight."
"I know..."
Since Twinkie is my OTP,i say this is the best chapter yet.
ohhhh twilight just broke like 4 right their...i wonder how the others will take it (couldn't find a sad dashie so MUSTACHE)
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Agreed.
Ahem, now for my comment about the chapter! I did like this one, especially because of the Twinkie, but I wished it was longer. However, since you addressed that and said you'd be making a longer chapter next, I'll let it slide. I'm going to hold that to you, now! (Joking, of course.)
Anyway, for my constructive criticism of this chapter, I'd suggest using two hyphens--AKA, a dash--to indicate a character breaking off their speech, like so. In every usage, this would work, except for when Twilight's stuttering. A single hyphen would work for the "P-pinkie," part, because it's the same word. Also, as my next piece of advice, try to use different words when you put "said, asked, or yelled." Try to find words that mean the same thing, but don't repeat after awhile.
Regardless of all that, I really did enjoy reading this. I thought Twilight was going to let Pinkie wallow in her misery, but I guess not! I can't wait to see what happens next, and am wondering if there will be any more love from the other ponies on Twilight. I'd assume so, but I'm looking forward to more! Good job with this chapter, as always!
I gotta admit...I was anticipating more 'conflict' when it comes to something like this, dood.
I was more for Twishy personally, but everyone except Pinkie puts little to no effort into trying to make Twilight their special somepony. After the PInkie date, I thought some one else would try to date her, Weird love-triangle quickly turned into a Pinkie running the race while everyone else is still stretching at the starting line, with ear plugs to keep them from hearing the starting gun, dood.
Still a neat story tho, dood.
aww shit this just got all kinds ah fucked up. this can't end well.
some how i thnk this will end with twi datin everyone or clones lots of clones
I expected more conflict up to this point. I agree with Fusion, seems like Pinkie Pies takin this one but I don't think it will be long before someone tries to get between them.
where the buck.. is the twishy? i found this in a twishy group not a twinkie group
lol twinkie