The Force Unleashed on Equestria

by Fire Angel

Chapter 4

A/N:Sorry this chapter is a little late. I've been really busy and haven't been able to get around to it, so I've decided to make it up to you by making this chapter a little longer than the others. In this chapter, I've decided to and my OC, so he will come in at the end of the chapter. Let me know if there is anything I can do to make this better. Give me some suggestions. I hope you keep liking this story.

Galen, Juno, and Twilight were sitting in the library. The other had left because they had things to do. Apparently, Twilight’s

dragon assistant could send letters to the princess by breathing fire on it. Galen couldn’t figure out how it worked, but since

Twilight explained magic, he used that as an answer.

“So,” Galen said, “What do we do now?”

“Well,” Twilight said, “We could see if the princess could introduce you to Ponyville so they don’t freak out when they see you.”

“Well,” he said, “If it means that I won’t be attacked by ponies; then I think that’s the best thing to do.”

She nodded and wrote what he guessed was a letter to the princess. Once she was finished, she called for her dragon
assistant; whose name was apparently Spike. She handed him the letter and he blew on it. Five minutes later, Spike belched
and a letter appeared.

“Woah,” Galen said, “That’s weird.”

Twilight chuckled and read the letter.

“Dear Twilight, I agree with introducing Galen to Ponyville, but it will have to wait until tomorrow. Me and my sister are busy with our duties and can’t leave at this moment. But for now, please tell Galen to stay out of sight.”

“Well,” he said, “She thinks rather highly of herself. Thinking she can tell me what I can and can’t do.”

“She’s the ruler of this land,” Twilight said.

“Exactly,” Galen said, “This land. I’m not from this land, so she has no control over me.”

“Well, you do make a point.”

“But because I am a good person, and don’t want to be attacked by ponies, we will go back into the forest until she arrives.”

“YOU CAN’T GO IN THERE,” Twilight shouted.

“And why not?”

“Because there are monsters out there!”

“Uh, Hello,” Galen said, drawing his sabers and activating them, “I can defend myself, thank you very much.”

“Oh, Right.” She gave an embarrassed.

We walked out to find my ship in the forest.

“Where do you think it is?” Juno asked.

“I’m not sure, but it should be too hard to find the only ship in this world.”

We walked for hours, but couldn’t find it. Then, we found the crater.

“Well,” Galen said, “It seems someone found my ship.”

“So,” a voice said behind them, “You’re the one who came here.”

Galen drew his Sabers and stepped in front of Juno who had drawn her gun.

“Who are you,” Galen asked.

“I, am Chrysalis,” the creature said. It had step out and now they could what it looked like. It was almost like an equine bug. It
had holes in its legs and fangs.

“What do you want?”

“I want to know about her.” She pointed and Juno.

“Back off,” Galen said, anger in his voice.

“Oh, you love her right?”

“I said, Back OFF!”

“Oh, I think not.” She stepped forward. She didn’t get the chance. Galen shouted and ran forward. He swung at her but she wasn’t there. He heard a scream and turned to see the creature holding Juno.

“NOOOOO!” He ran at the creature, but she vanished in a flash. He was seething in anger. He decided to have a little chat with the princess. He didn’t have time to make it to the library, so he just ran through town and saw the train. He jumped and landed on top of it. An hour later, he was in Cantorlot. He jumped up and landed on a roof. He still didn’t want to be seen, so he
made his way to the castle on rooftops. He made it to the castle gate and jumped. He landed in front of the guards.

“I need to see the princess,” he said.

“I can’t let you do that,” they said.

“Then I’ll force my way in.” He punched the guards and they fell to the ground unconscious. He ran in the castle and made his way to the throne room. On his way, he pushed a white unicorn with a tan mane.

“HOW DARE YOU PUSH A PRINCE,” he yelled in a royal voice. Galen stopped. He hated when someone talked like they were all that. He turned around and punched the prince in the face. He fell to the ground, out cold. He continued to make his way to the throne room. He finally found it and charged a blast of force which blasted the door off its hinges. The princess looked at the now door less doorway to see Galen there, running at her. He jumped at her and she found a beam at her throat.

“You will tell me all you know of the one called Chrysalis.”

Her eyes widen at that name.

“Why?” She was surprised that he knew of her.

“She took Juno, so if you don’t tell me where she is, then your wings will be put on the ceiling.”

She gulped and ran through her memories on where Chrysalis’s cave was.

“I-I w-will take y-you to h-her,” she stuttered. She stood up and charged her horn. Before she could teleport, she screamed in
pain as her horn was grabbed.

“I don’t think so. You are going to lead me there, WITHOUT magic.”

She nodded and walked out of the castle. She made her way into the forest and lead Galen to Chrysalis’s cave. Two hours later they found a large cave.

“So this is it?”

“Yes.”

He walked in and saw a green glow. He followed it and saw the creature sitting on what looked like a throne. She was surrounded by creatures that looked a lot like her. He was filled with anger as soon as he saw her. He ran in and started killing all creatures. They were all shocked when he started killing them, but regained their senses and started attacking. He was now surrounded. But they didn’t expect what happened next. He curled into a ball and started floating in the air. As they watched, they saw what looked like he was surrounded by a bluish ball. Then; he screamed and pushed out and the ball
expanded to push all of creatures out into the wall, knocking them out. He landed on the ground and slowly made his way to
Chrysalis. She charged a spell and fired at him. He raised he saber and it shot back at her. She flew back and hit the wall.

“WHERE IS SHE!?” He jumped on top of her; picked her up, and pinned her against the wall. She stayed quiet.

“WHERE IS SHE!?”

“She’s in the dungeon.”

He pulled her off the wall and chucked her across the room. She hit the wall and fell to the ground. He found a guard and picked it up.

“Where is the dungeon?” His voice was dripping with venom.

He pointed a shaky hoof down a hall. Galen dropped the creature and ran down the hall. He found the dungeon and ran in. He ran checking every cell. Finally, he found her. He smashed the door and walked in. She looked up and saw him. He ran over to her and helped her up.

“Are you okay,” he asked.

“Yeah.”

“Let’s get you out of here.” He put her arm around his neck and helped her up. As they were walking out though, they heard a groan. They looked back and saw something in a cell. It looked like a unicorn, but then they saw wings. It was an alicorn. It
had a white coat and a fiery mane. Galen looked at Juno and she nodded. He put her down and walked up to the cell. He
managed to cut the door down and walked up to the alicorn. She saw him and her eyes filled with fear.

“It’s alright,” he said, “I’m not going to hurt you. What’s your name?”

“Soul Lightning.”

“I’m Galen. I’m here to help you.”

She still seemed a little cautious, but she nodded her head. Galen walked up to her and picked her up carefully. She wrapped her arms around his neck as he walked out of the cell. He managed to grab Juno’s arm and put it around his neck. They
walked out of the cave and made their way back to the castle.

The sun was starting to go down, so they decided to make camp and wait until morning before they continued. Galen set up a fire. Juno and Soul had fallen asleep and Galen kept watch. He had just gotten back from getting wood for the fire when he heard a growl. He looked around and saw the source. A pair of yellow eyes were sitting in the darkness. He was about to
attack when he saw seven more pairs of eyes appear and get closer. He activated his sabers and got into a defensive stance.

The eyes stopped for a moment before getting closer. Then he saw what the eyes were attached to. They looked like wolves, but they were made of wood.

The wooden wolves jumped at him. He brought his saber up and sliced one in half. Another jumped and that one lost his head. Then they realized that they wouldn’t be able to kill him alone. So they all attacked at once. He killed three of them but eventually were able to knock him down. He was now being bitten by two different wooden wolves. But then he pushed his hand up and they flew off. Then he pointed his hands at them and they were hit with a powerful blast of lightning that killed them.

He was hurt and bleeding but he made it back to the camp and found that Soul was up. He walked into the light and she saw him.

“OH CELESTIA!” She ran over to him and helped him to sit down. She looked him over and found multiple bite marks. She charged a spell and touched her horn to him. The marks slowly began to heal. When all the bites were healed; she fell to the ground, exhausted. Galen ran over to her and kept her from hitting her head.

“Are you alright,” he asked.

“Yeah, I’m fine.”

He helped her over to the fire and laid her down. He sat down next to her and stroked her fiery mane. She seemed to like it a lot. He continued to stroke her mane until something strange happened. She lifted her head and laid it across his lap and fell asleep. He looked down at her and his heart nearly exploded by how adorable she looked. He leaned against the tree and fell asleep.

They woke up just after the sun rose. They made their way to the castle. Once they made it to the castle gate, they were stopped by the guards.

“Let us pass,” Galen said.

“We can’t allow you to pass. Under order of princess Celestia, you are placed under arrest.”

“I don’t think so.” He used force grip and threw them across the courtyard. He motioned for Juno and Soul to follow him as he made his way into the castle. They encountered little guards, those of which were thrown out of the way by Galen, and made it to the throne room. He told Juno and Soul to wait outside until he came back. He walked into the throne room and they heard Celestia scream. They heard some shouting and smashing. After a minute, Galen stepped out and told them to come in. Juno walked in first then Soul. As soon as Celestia saw Soul, her eyes widen and began to water.

“S-Soul,” she said, her voice quivering, “Is that you?”

“M-Mother?”

“SOUL!!!”

“MOTHER!!!”

Celestia ran over to Soul who did the same thing. When they met, they hugged tightly and cried.

“I’ve missed you so much, my daughter!”

“Mother, I’m so sorry mother. I’ll never leave you and daddy again.”

Celestia’s horn glowed and then stopped. Five seconds later, there was a flash and there stood a red alicorn with a fiery mane stood there. He saw Soul and his eyes started to water as he walked up to her. She saw him and shouted, “DADDY!” she ran up to him and hugged him. He smiled and nuzzled her close.

“Soul,” he said. His voice was deep but caring, “I’ve missed you so much. Don’t ever leave again.”

“I’m sorry daddy. I promise to never leave without telling you again.”

“Soul,” he dad said, “How did you get here?”

“He saved me,” Soul said as she pointed at Galen. Her dad looked at him and walked over to him.

“Sir,” he said, “I thank you for saving my daughter. I am Aethor.”

“I’m just glad I could help. Though it would have been easier if Celestia hadn’t put guards to arrest us.”

Aethor looked at Celestia who gave a nervous smile.

“I apologize for that. She was just watching out for her kingdom.”

Galen nodded and looked at Soul. She smiled at him and walked over to him. He kneeled down and she gave him a hug. He
was a little surprised at first, but he hugged her back. She let go and walked back by her father’s side.

“I thank you again for saving my daughter. If there is anything you need; all you need to do is ask.”

“Thank you.” Then he remembered something. “There is something we need.”

“And what is that,” Aethor asked.

“We need a place to stay. We do not have the means to buy one, nor to build one.”

Aethor nodded and thought for a moment.

“If you like, we have plenty of spare rooms. You can stay here until further notice.”

“Thank you,” Galen said. Aethor nodded and led him and Juno down the hall. Five minutes later, he opened a door and led
them inside.

“Wow,” was all Galen said.

“This is where you will stay. As you can see, there is plenty of room. If you need anything else, find one of us, and we shall help you.”

He nodded and walked out. Galen and Juno got into bed and fell asleep.

Author's Note:

I fixed the spacing so let me know if this is any better.

Comments

[dakingofmuffins]

well due to the new comment system i cant always have first

[X-9321]

THIS. IS. VUNDERBAR!!!!!!!!!

[MLP BRONY 27]

rushed. needs to be longer and not have all events compressed. but good nonetheless

[Onlyicanhear]

Like the new comment system, no more FIRST! We still need more smily faces tough

The pace of the general events is still too quick but it's definitely improving. Also in the first part of the story there are an excessive use of return key, i am serious, something like:
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Twilight explained magic, he used that as an answer.

“So,” Galen said, “What do we do now?”
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It could have simply been: Twilight explained magic, he used that as an answer. “So,” Galen said, “What do we do now?”

Also use preview to see how the chapter came out, it will help avoid forms mistake you have nothing directly to do about, the chapter simply appear different than how you write it. Just preview and you will be fine

[Fire Angel]

>>Onlyicanhear
I see what you mean. I'll be sure to preview the chapter before posting it.
I should have done that in the first place.