Fluttershy was outside taking care of her critter friends, but she wasn’t alone. She was with her best friend that she'd just told about what had happened the day before.
“It was the perfect opportunity, but Spike had to arrive!” Rarity clearly wasn’t happy.
“It wasn’t his fault… Princess Celestia wrote to Twilight and he had to let her know,” Fluttershy was giving seeds to the birds.
“Couldn’t he wait until Twilight got back and then tell her?”
“It seemed important, Rarity… Remember that it was one of the Princesses who wrote to her…” Rarity sighed.
“You’re right… But it was the perfect time to tell her, and now we have to wait!”
After a few hours of taking care of the little critters, Fluttershy needed to rest and was about to get in her home when her friend stopped her.
“Wait, darling, we should go to the park, don’t lock yourself up in there, let’s get some fresh air.” Rarity stood between her friend and the door; she wasn't going to take a no for an answer.
“That’s very nice of you Rarity, but…”
“No buts, come on!” The Unicorn took Fluttershy’s hoof and forced her to come with her.
Once at the park, they looked for a place where there weren't many ponies close, but it was hard to find a spot seeing as how it was spring.
“We should be fine here; nopony will hear us.” Rarity said while putting a blanket on the grass to sit.
Fluttershy joined her, “I've been thinking, Rarity… What if those interruptions were signs telling me that I shouldn’t do it?”
“Don’t say that, Fluttershy; those were just coincidences! Don’t give up on your true love… Tell me, darling… Do you like her?!” Fluttershy looked at her, wondering why she asked such an obvious question.
“More than that... I love her, Rarity, more than anything. I would do anything to be with her alone… I… I… I want her to know how I feel, and I want her to love me back…!” Her eyes started to water when she was in the middle of her speech.
Rarity was about to cry too. She really needed to express her feelings to her secret love. But how could she help her? It seemed that every time she was about to tell her, something happened. Next time she had to make sure nothing interrupted her. After clearing her tears, Rarity spoke.
“I have an idea, darling… Next time I’ll follow you and I will be close to make sure that nothing interrupts your confession.” Fluttershy wiped her tears.
“Y-you would that for me…?”
“Of course! I want you to be happy; I hate to see you like this. I’ll help you in any way I can.” The yellow Pegasus walked to where her friend was and gave her a hug, which was returned almost immediately.
“Thank you, Rarity, you’re such a good friend! I don’t know what I would do without you!”
“You are too kind, Fluttershy.”
“And you are so generous, Rarity.” They both giggled.
They broke the hug and Rarity took a look at her friend’s face. Fluttershy's smile slowly faded and she knew why; there was a problem to solve. “You should take her out for a romantic dinner.”
Fluttershy looked down. “I… I don’t think that’s a good idea… There would be too many ponies and I wouldn’t tell her…”
“Then invite her to eat at your place.” But her friend once again rejected the idea.
“It’s too romantic, just us eating alone… I would scare her even before telling her…”
“But yesterday you two were on a hill with other couples close to the sunset, that was romantic too and she didn’t leave!” Fluttershy knew that she was right, but she didn’t find the idea of a romantic dinner suitable to confess; she wanted them to be alone under the moon with Luna as their witness. She had to try it again.
“I’ll go to the library tonight and ask her out for a walk, I want to try it again.” The Pegasus said as she stood up, sounding sure of herself. “I will tell her tonight, no matter what!”
“Yes you will, because I will make sure that nothing prevents you from doing so. This night, Twilight Sparkle will know your love for her!”
“You like Twilight?!” They both gasped surprised and their hearts stopped for a moment. They knew which pony's voice that belonged to, or, better said, dragon. They turned to see Spike looking at them with his mouth open; clearly not believing what he'd just heard. But that wasn’t the worst part... He was on Twilight’s back. She also couldn’t believe what she'd just heard. She was staring at Fluttershy with her mouth opening and closing. Twilight wanted to say something but she found herself out of words. After several moments of silence, the lavender Unicorn could finally say something.
“Fluttershy… You…?” But the timid Pegasus started to cry and trotted away. Her sobbing became less and less audible the further she went.
“Fluttershy!” Rarity tried to call her, but it was no use. She stood still and looked at Twilight. “We didn’t want you to find out this way…”
Oh my, what happens next?!
Oh dear...
Short, but sweet. I'm a little nervous on Fluttershy's behalf... And I really hope Twilight isn't harsh on her.
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Sorry about that. Anything specific?
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Yeah, just started on this chapter. I tried not to change too much from the original content, but I'll pay more attention to stuff like that in the future. Sorry, and you're not being mean or anything.
Me: Okay, this plan sounds like it will work. I want to see what happens next.
*reads ending*
Me: OH, YOU'VE GOTTA BE FUCKIN' KIDDING ME!!!
Ok. We have a plan now we just have to.....
what did you say?
Well... Shit.
*ending*
Me: ...Buck.
Twitch
Twilight, twitch, Spike
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It was right toward the end, and I just couldn't let it go...
"the timid
pegasistarted to cry..."This is such a common error for MLP writers across the board. "Pegasi" is plural for pegasus, and since Fluttershy is only one pegasus, to refer to her as pegasi is incorrect.
If you guys can make little chinks like this go away, you'll be that much closer to perfection.
I must say, this plot twist set my hair on end. I'm excited! :D Let us see what we're dealt next! Onward, to victory!
Oh, I almost forgot. The fact that Twilight's reaction is so fluid that it's impossible to tell where she really stands on the issue is perhaps the best part of this story so far. I'm really, really excited for the next chapter. :D
*I read the ending*
"...Buck Rarity for saying it so loud, and Twilight for standing their instead of going after Flutters."
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I don't know, Twilight probably would have a panic attack if you want to be honest, she isn't the most stable when it comes to big surprises.