What the hell did I just read?

this was okay but i just need to not read it agin

Well, it certainly is an interesting concept, though you should work on your pacing a bit. As it is now, stuff happens at a far too fast pace. The writing was decent, some easily avoidable mistakes (ie. "It's" instead of "its"), but none too many and quickly read over. You should also start a new line every time a different character starts talking.

As said, a good concept, but a little less good execution. Keep at it!

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and now, I am needed elsewhere.
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As soon as I saw the picture for this story, I knew I had to read it - I love Diamond Tiara x Silver Spoon. Unfortunately, there are quite a few errors and things you should think about changing.

One side of it's chitin shell had a deep crack in it

Should be 'its'. You're using the contraction for 'it is', and "One side of it is chitin shell" doesn't make sense.

brought out a necklace of pears which she placed around the changeling's neck.

Just missed the 'l' in 'pearls' here.

willing to give you all the love you could ever eat.I've loved Silver Spoon for months

You need a space after a period.

front door of the mansion;as the best and only

After a semicolon too.

metamorphosed into a black insect thing with hole's in it's legs

No apostrophe needed for the first bolded word, and see the first error I quoted for how to fix the second bolded word.

Besides those, I didn't notice any other spelling errors. There are a few other things I'd like to bring up though.

The first is the pacing of the story. I LOVE the premise of the story; I've been meaning to write something involving a pony finding love with a changeling because they can't be with the one they actually love. However, it just goes by way too fast. It's just over 1000 words, and it already seems to have reached a climax, with Silver Spoon discovering the changeling. It just seems like the story is half over already; you could expand on what you have so much more.

The second is the thoughts. I realize it's a common thing to use italics to demonstrate thoughts, and I've certainly done it a few times myself, but it seems really excessive here. About a third of the story is thoughts, and it just seems really awkward.

The third thing is the number of paragraphs. It's not a bad thing to have long paragraphs, but there aren't too many paragraphs, and I think it would work better if you maybe split up a few of them.

Overall, it's not an awful story, but it needs work. I'm going to follow, and hold off on giving it a rating for the moment.

love it keep it up

A good storyline and such, but there are many errors, and the story feels rushed. Other than that, it's a great story.

the concept is good, but you need to polish your writting skills...

I'd give you a thumb up, but you need to refine your grammar....

How is this dark?

Awesome.

1550926 Shhhhhhh... I like Pears.

Ok, way too fast. I hope that is just a temporary approach, shove us in and all that. Honestly, it feels like you cut out an entire chapter. "I saved the changeling, (REDACTED) BAM! Silver comes backnand finds out. Changelingnis chased away. Summary useless."

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Dr. Whooves hates pears...

I like this story sir.

Thumbs up!

1570469 which is why rarity has a small pear grove near her store to ward him off. I gave her the trees when he got touchy feely, something about her being the epitome of unicorn beauty