Very interesting I'm a big derpy fan I'll keep an eye on it

Interesting story. Quick question, did any firearms come with this veteran to equestria?

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What use would any firearms be? A finite supply of ammo and then it's a club or a neato doorstop. He's better off with the locally sourced weapons if they would even let him have any, which I doubt.

This first chapter was pretty good! I enjoyed it.

If I had any critiques, it'd have to be the formatting and the sudden shift from second person to first person. But other than that, I liked it! Keep it up, author!

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good catch, didn't realize
trying to feel out my preferred writing style between stories, decided against second person early on

with injuries like that, he should’ve had a pretty good VA compensation benefits, until he got transported to Equestria. Disfiguring scars, anatomical loss of foot almost certainly Service connected psych at what’s probably at least a 50%.

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Thank goodness for that. 2nd person/reader-inserts are a niche too far for me...

Story seems interesting so far!

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Author's note patient file was a nice touch.

Tells us more about the protagonist appearance and behavior and how some ponies might regards him, all without the need for a clumsy intro description that would break the narrative.

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look up Jona Hex comic. Just clean him up a bit. and give him a better attitude Jona was meaner than cat whiz in your cheerios.

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This kind of notes made up from mock documents can actually be epigraphs (to be on top of chapter). It's a respected style used by fiction and science fiction classics, such Simak or Bradbury.

História parece promissor