An HIE / Anon story about an American Veteran that winds up in Equestria during a hunting trip, and what follows as he tries to acclimate to his new life. Single-Mother Derpy Focused Romance, but involves (platonically) other characters.
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The obvious way for the story to go is griffon girl swipes the rifle, I feel like.
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Why would she randomly steal from her savior? That’s incredibly grimey for no reason.
He has tracked humanity all over their nice clean floors and the elements are left holding the mop. :)
I really like how confused they are over this, and how they want to make it black and white. No, that's not right. They would feel more comfortable if they could make it black and white. They seem to acknowledge the nuances to it and are willing to adapt to that.
I think it confuses them that, now that what he did is known, he is openly honest about it.
I also think it has them thinking about what they do on a weekly basis. Granted, their methods are nowhere near as drastic, as they are a kids cartoon, but it raises the question of where their authority comes from to tromp out and have their antics.
It reminds me of some of those real-life stories where the good samaritan breaks the law to help someone and is put in jail/prosecuted for it. I wonder how different this would have been if he had to do something like this clearly within the ponies' jurisdiction?
I, personally, would congratulate someone who took out someone who was willing to press a child into slavery and work them to death. Heck, I'd buy them lunch. I'm sure there would be a noose and torch crowd too though.
That was quite the dark arc. I'm wondering though what place it serves in the overall narrative. Because shooting Diamond Dogs to save creatures doesn't seem related to a possible romance with Derpy. Feels like a bizarre tangent until it becomes relevant again. Just got to wait and see I suppose.
I know your stories are probably pre-written already and you're just now posting them to FimFic, but I have a good feeling that they're all gonna blow up in a good way, like with RunicTreetops'.
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appreciated, but not prewritten, I just like to word vomit and the story goes where it goes
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The most immediate impact I can see is whether Derpy would want to be romanced by someone who pays for their dates by shooting the neighbors and taking their stuff. Of course this is mitigated by the fact that with the same action he shot up the *slavers* next door and not only freed slaves but saved an innocent child that had been kidnapped.
The next most immediate concern would be that all in all, he has probably brought home maybe $500 worth of gems. I mean, spike got a gem for pet sitting one animal for one day. How much does one get paid for pet sitting? And the loot came to a backpack full of pet sitting payments. How is he going to use this to pay off his debt/springboard himself? He took the time-honored method of raiding a nearby settlement to acquire enough resources to keep himself alive, but that isn't sustainable, moral concerns aside.
And he has referenced that his skillset isn't in great demand in Equestria. If he is a soldier by profession, he'll have to adapt and learn a new trade or find someplace to ply the only trade he knows. This may draw him away from where he lives.
I think he should sit down and listen to what Redheart wants to tell him. It could be that she was going to say something like "If you want this to be a reliable income, you are going to have to collect and dry in bulk, and sell to a medical company instead of the hospital" or "Next time you'll have to conform to government standards when you provide medical herbs and have them dried with no contaminants." Maybe even "Collect this next time. Its really profitable."
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What about the RGRE-ish angle from the first conversation with Redheart? Not that I want it in the story, I think the trope is icky.
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moreso just my personal explanation for why a majority of the characters are female / allowance for 'herd' type behavior for the few stories I have planned where it'll involve multiple females
I don't mind RGRE but I don't think I'll be writing any styles that fully lean on it, for me it's just worldbuilding trying to account for species and skewed numbers of named male v named female characters
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