Chapter 2 - The Candy Master
Twilight Velvet dropped Twilight Sparkle off at the Kindergarten before rushing off, leaving a confused Twilight behind.
"Twilight!" A voice behind her calls. She turned around and saw Miss Celestia waving a hoof, standing in front of the building. "Come over here, I've got a surprise for you."
Not knowing what else to do, Twilight trotted over. Behind them, a bunch of foals trot inside, some of them looking at them with various expressions. When Twilight finally made it, she looked up to see Miss Celestia with a conspora...conspiratira...conspiratorial grin. She hoofed over two small wrapped packages before trotting back inside, leaving a still confused Twilight.
"Wow, Miss Celestia gave ya her special candy." Applejack was suddenly behind her, sending Twilight to the floor in shock. It hurt. "And she gave ya two! Could ah have one..?" The orange earth pony suddenly looked even more cute. Twilight didn't know what to do, so she 'eep'ed' and rushed inside the kindergarten.
Before she could take two more steps after entering, she was tackled. Twilight found herself on the ground for the second time today. Her flank hurt! Then a thought occurred to her that froze her on the spot. What if she got her cutie mark in falling, that would be the end for her!
"Oop, sorry!" Rainbow Dash helped the poor filly to her hooves and grinned. "I was flying..."
"No yous not!" Called out a random colt.
"Shuddup!" She called back. A few kindergarteners gasped, one even started to cry.
"Hey! Language!"
"Sorry Miss!" Rainbow kicked at a wooden block. "So, I was flying and this dragon was like, raaawr. I had turn, so I did! Then I crash into you. M'sorry."
"Is okay." Twilight tried to look sincere, but she was still scared. She don't want a falling cutie mark! So, she started to scooch away.
"Hey, wait, thas Miss Celestia's special candy? And yous has two! Means you give one to me!" Rainbow chuckled as if that was normal. What she didn't realize was that Twilight was galloping away now. No falling cutie mark for her! She weaved through the many foals but was then immediately intercap...interceptood...intercepted by somepony. Twilight jumped back in an attempt to not fall, but her pudgy legs couldn't react fast enough and she ended up on her face.
"Oh, are you okay?" A yellow hoof helped Twilight back up. "Oh. Oh. Is that Miss Celestia's special candy?" Fluttershy was staring at the two wrapped candies Twilight still had in her mouth.
"...yes?" She was edging away from the yellow pegasus. She was no longer quiet and she also made her fall!
"OoOoOoOoH!" Pink filled her vision.
"AH!" Twilight fell again. It really hurts! She quickly checked and sighed, relieved. She does not have a cutie mark...yet.
"Pinkie, stop scaring Twilight. Is not nice." Rarity trotted up behind Pinkie. Today, she didn't have red stuff. She looked prettier without it. Twilight decided to take her chances with the other unicorn, Rarity hasn't made her fall.
"Is not my fault!"
"I know, but, oooh! Is that Miss Celestia's special candy?" Rarity was suddenly really close to Twilight, but this time she was prepared. Instead of falling over, she decided to sit. HA! Twilight adopted a smug smile, she won't get that falling cutie mark.
"Why do you look so happy?" Fluttershy suddenly asked, also really close.
"Umm...wha?" Twilight was suddenly taken aback by how many faces was looking at her, including Rainbow and Applejack who were now standing by her other friends.
"Twilit is feeling special because Miss Cewestia gave her candy!" Pinkie Pie cried, attracting even more attention. "Now she wants dem for herself."
"Is this true?" Applejack asked, looking a bit hurt.
"I thoughts we was friends!" Rainbow said, her wings buzzing angrily.
"Thas not nice, dawling." Rarity harrumphed, looking away.
"Oh..." Fluttershy hugged a bunny plushie close.
Twilight burst into tears, dropped the candies, and ran away. She didn't know why her new friends were being so mean. She was just so focused on not getting that cutie mark! With her blurry vision, she made out a corner where she could cry alone. But before she made it, she bumped into a white mare and fell. She cried even harder. Now Miss Celestia was being mean!
"My little pony, what's wrong?"
"No!" Twilight tried to scooch away, but she didn't get far.
"Twilight," her voice was soothing. "What's wrong?"
"My friends are being mean, and now you're being mean!" She said through sobs.
"I'm sorry, dear, truly." Celestia levitated Twilight up and had her stand. "There, a filly should be on the floor. Now, why don't you tell me about your friends."
"Well..." Twilight sniffed, wiping her hooves over her eyes a couple of times to get rid of the tears. "They wanted the candy you gave me and I only had two! I don't have enough for...for, uhhh...five and one."
"Six, dear."
"Yeah!" Twilight sat back down, feeling even more sad. "I wasn't paying attention and they got mad. I don't have the candy anymore, I dropped it. They probably don't like me anymore."
"Well, I don't know about that." Celestia said.
"What you mean?" Twilight looked up and then saw the five fillies standing in front of her looking sad too.
"We're sorry, Twilit." Pinkie's mane was all droopy.
"Yeah, we was not cool." Rainbow had tears in her eyes.
"Ah'm sorry." Applejack was holding her cowpony hat over her chest.
"We has the candies if you want it back." Rarity said, offering the still wrapped candies.
Fluttershy was just crying.
"How about this." Celestia lifted four more candies from her saddlebags and gave them to Twilight. "Why don't you give these to your friends and make up."
"Oh." Twilight sniffled, the tears drying up. "Thank you, miss." She quickly hugged the mare before scampering off with her new friends. Soon after, they were all giggling and munching on the very special candy.
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Again, this was an adorable job on this latest chapter. Definitely liked the work that went into the dialogue, characterizations, general wrap-up and future chapter set-up. Of course, a side benefit of setting this in kindergarten is that it makes most of the episodes' lessons make even more sense as it would be hard for kids that young to learn that sort of stuff As for the Equestria Girls stuff, perhaps simplify things by not doing a kindergarten version (though Sunset Shimmer could be introduced as a student at a rival kindergarten [perhaps taught by Mister Discord a possibly TOO friendly rival of Miss Celestia if you catch my drift] bullying Twilight and her friends until they teach her a better way).
Anyway, really looking forward to more of this.
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Aw, thank yooou!
Indeed, kindergarten is quite the playground for lessons. It's a bit surprising and saddening that MLP didn't do much with the CMC and their fellow classmates.
We'll see for the Equestria Girls, I'm still undecided.
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More than fair enough. Of course, I could see "the Last Problem" being set two decades in the future with a now young-adult Twilight taking over for Miss Celestia (who ends up becoming the Superintendent of overall schools in the city) as the new kindergarten teacher. But that's still a long way away, so you will have lots of thinking time.
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That is actually a really good idea, I haven't thought that far. I'll try to remember it, thanks!
Nice chapter! Looks very similar to the Grand Galloping Gala episode where Twilight doesn't have enough tickets
Keep up the good work!
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Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it!
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You're welcome. On another note, Adult Twilight's class in a possible version of the series finale could include kindergarten age versions of Luster Dawn, Sunny Starscout, Hitch Trailblazer, Sprout Cloverleaf, Izzy Moonbow, Misty Brightdawn, Zipp Storm and Pipp Petals.
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Perhaps, perhaps.
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Thanks for considering that. And, on another note, considering Shining and Cadance are only eleven, maybe twelve in this universe, I'm going to guess that the second season mess isn't going to be a wedding - just their first date.
And another thought concerning the Equestria Girls thing - perhaps it IS just a kindergarten in another part of the city that the fillies' imagination (akin to Rugrats or Muppet Babies) leads them to believe is another universe.
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I'm not sure about a date, they're too young. I was going to have them be substitutes for the class, considering that Cadance was a babysitter in canon.
As for EG, I'm going to add Sunset Shimmer in, but I'm still undecided how, but we've got plenty of time till then.
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Yeah. Makes a lot of sense concerning Shining and Cadance.
And thanks for the verification on the other point. :-D
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Anytime!
Awesome story so far, can't wait to see more! And i already liked this, so instead, have
a3 Derpy's!Just realized i posted on the wrong chapter.
Have the Derps anyway though!
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Yay! Three derps!
Thank you, glad you enjoy it!
I just love the fact that this story is narrated in the style of a foal is just adorable
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glad you like it!