Interesting premise to see Chrysalis in the new gen and she's my favourite villain so looking forward to seeing this story, especially given you wrote To Ne'er Come Down Again which is an absolutely incredible Chrysalis story
Did you have Chrysalis pull a General Zod (being imprisoned for her crimes in a way that happened to save her from something that wiped out the rest of her species), or is there some other explanation of how she survived without magic?
11623348 My point is more that without magic all the changelings most likely starved... except Chrysalis, if she was a statue at the time. Sort of like how, when Krypton was destroyed, all their worst criminals (of which Zod is the most well-known) survived because they were imprisoned in the Phantom Zone.
an interesting start, but the question begins to torment me: "How did it happen that there was only one Chrysalis inside the statue? Where did the rest go?
This is a really cool idea. Chrysalis is playing Sprout at the moment, but because he has no clue who she is, he treats her like a creepy bug-pony that just so happens to be attractive and nice to him, so he shows her genuine compassion. Chrysalis, not being used to someone being compassionate to her (especially someone as “gifted” as Sprout), has no idea how to effectively take charge of the situation, especially when Sprout says and does things that catch her off guard.
So I'm finally getting around to reading this and I hate to be that guy but few things to go over
although the only thing he’d yet to find anything even remotely interesting on his long, aimless expeditions
you might want to remove "the only thing"
she hissed, baring its fangs at him.
Not exactly an error but in this chapter you jump between using her and it a lot
The little earth pony stallion with a crimson mane, white fur around his hooves, and a blonde mane
crimson coat
by vastly more unnerving concern
given you're talking about her concern for how much time has passed, a singular concern, you probably wanted to put "by a vastly more unnerving concern"
Interesting premise to see Chrysalis in the new gen and she's my favourite villain so looking forward to seeing this story, especially given you wrote To Ne'er Come Down Again which is an absolutely incredible Chrysalis story
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Not to suck myself off, but I To Ne'er my best work
Hopefully you like this little story
Let's not get crazy!
Did you have Chrysalis pull a General Zod (being imprisoned for her crimes in a way that happened to save her from something that wiped out the rest of her species), or is there some other explanation of how she survived without magic?
Oh, I'm so happy this is out!!!
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Well, remember that discord survived being trapped as a a statue for a thousand years.
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as a rule asuming that anything discord did in any way makes that thing posible is a bad idea...spirit of chaos and all that.
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My point is more that without magic all the changelings most likely starved... except Chrysalis, if she was a statue at the time. Sort of like how, when Krypton was destroyed, all their worst criminals (of which Zod is the most well-known) survived because they were imprisoned in the Phantom Zone.
an interesting start, but the question begins to torment me: "How did it happen that there was only one Chrysalis inside the statue? Where did the rest go?
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Perhaps they were removed for some reason...
>Insert dramatic DUN DUN DUUUUUUUN here
Chryssi is top tier always
This is a really cool idea. Chrysalis is playing Sprout at the moment, but because he has no clue who she is, he treats her like a creepy bug-pony that just so happens to be attractive and nice to him, so he shows her genuine compassion. Chrysalis, not being used to someone being compassionate to her (especially someone as “gifted” as Sprout), has no idea how to effectively take charge of the situation, especially when Sprout says and does things that catch her off guard.
It kinda reminds me of…
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This is awesome!
That's it, Sprout! Keep her flat-hooved!
So I'm finally getting around to reading this and I hate to be that guy but few things to go over
you might want to remove "the only thing"
Not exactly an error but in this chapter you jump between using her and it a lot
crimson coat
given you're talking about her concern for how much time has passed, a singular concern, you probably wanted to put "by a vastly more unnerving concern"
feels a bit redundant to use upper twice
Sorry if I'm stepping on your toes here XD