Sorry to not get to this last night as promised, but I’ll do my longpost on chapter 2 now.
The sun was high in the sky before they’d climbed out of their sleeping bag — and only after Ebon had unknotted himself from Edelweiss’s inviting pokénest
My greatest contribution to fanfiction may yet be the term 'nest' to describe female reproductive equipment. And it works doubly good with pokemon, since 'pokenest' is a double-entendre in its own right.
...pumping a week's worth of pent-up sexual frustration into his sister’s willing womb.
Go, Ebon! This doesn't even need a scene description to visualize it.
“You slept well!” Glassie winked at Ebon and Edelweiss
"Actually, we didn't sleep at--"
"Ebon!"
"Er, uh, I mean... oh, hey, want some miltank sausage?"
The purr motor in her throat was going full bore; wetness along the surface of Glassie’s neck showed evidence of recent intimate grooming between the two eevees.
Love it. And there's no nicer a sound than a purring cat.
“We haven’t spotted any outlaws since arriving here weeks ago and there haven’t been any aggressive moves from the denizens of Ponyta Pass itself. I can’t remember the last time I’ve visited such a peaceful place.”
"Too peaceful. I was at least hoping there'd be some aliens or something."
"Aliens, Glassie? Really? How likely is that, really?"
"No less likely that Sike jumping into bed with me last night or you being Ebon's sister, Edelweiss... oh, sorry, am I not supposed to say that out loud?"
Glassie shook her head. “Combat makes all pokémon stronger, Ebon. It elevates the civilized and the savage alike! It’s an insult to the savages we’ve brought out of the darkness to suggest a good beating wasn’t exactly what they had coming.”
The more I learn about Glassie, the more I like her. Can't wait to see her butt heads with Rainbow Dash, probably literally.
semi-organized bands of wild pokémon who would sometimes surrender after being fought to submission in honorable combat in close-quarters. Most would be allowed to flee after being defeated, depending on the circumstances.
Be glad they're not coming to Tellus during the pony/griffon war, and the first things they meet are gryphon raider groups or harpie pirate clans.
If they attack us, we use the escape orb back to camp, equip ourselves suitably for battle and you all know the rest.”
“For glory, for money, and for eevee!” Glassie saluted Ebon with one paw over her eyes.
What else is there? Aside from bat-ponies, maybe... please tell me they'll appear in this!
“D’awww!” Edelweiss exclaimed. “You two are adorable together. Don’t ruin a good thing, Glassie!”
Glassie gave a sort of resigned chuckle. “You know me, Edelweiss, Ebon. I always do.”
Please don't hurt her, Glassie. I've only known her for a little over a chapte, and yet, I already know Sike's too precious for words. Which goes to show how well you've already developed these four. Well done, Sempai!
The four teammates stood in a single file line at the kangaskhan statue, withdrawing everything from their bank back in Treasure Town they’d need.
Unfortunately, they quickly discovered that the bank had learned of old social media posts of theirs and froze their funds after an outcry.
Ebon looked back at Sike. “This isn’t the time for doubting yourself either! You’ve got ability but you lack confidence and patience. Let the enemy see nothing but your smile; this is what the guild master taught me. So show them your smile as you smite them!”
Go away, boner! Ebon mentally chastised his illicit erection.
Now I resent that! My boi Ebon's erection is never illicit! It's a force of nature and always a beautiful sight to behold.
But I can feel your thoughts, Ebon! Even still you’re becoming more aroused at the thought of me. This is so cool! Sike continued her mental dialog.
She gets some for the first time and now she's insatiable. Not counting any odd influences that might be having an untoward effect on her, of course.
Sike gave a pout and broke the psychic connection. Ebon thanked Arceus for that one small favor. Though somehow, he felt more distracted than ever, navigating the dungeon ruminating on the fact that one of his subordinates not only knew how badly he wanted to stud his nubile, young recruit, but that his erection would possibly never go down at this rate.
"Crystal Heart Meth is not for everyone. Seek help if you have an erection lasting more than four hours..."
Some real action and the promise of much more to come! Sike came around quickly. Now if we could see her overcome her fears and learn to fight... or maybe the pony she'll most identify with is Fluttershy...? Look forward to finding out either way!
My greatest contribution to fanfiction may yet be the term 'nest' to describe female reproductive equipment. And it works doubly good with pokemon, since 'pokenest' is a double-entendre in its own right.
This is so true. Retrofitting my pony tools to work with Pokémon has been one of the more vexing challenges this sort of fiction and you my other fur-aligned prereaders have been instrumental in allowing me to branch out.
"Actually, we didn't sleep at--"
"Ebon!"
"Er, uh, I mean... oh, hey, want some miltank sausage?"
Smooth as butter! But his sense of decency and large penis allows him to overcome the occasional awkward moment with his beloved sister.
Love it. And there's no nicer a sound than a purring cat.
I understand well from long experience. I still miss my old cat I had to put down last year. My house is much easier to clean and far more sanitary but it's never been lonelier. I don't think it's a coincidence that I was drawn to Pokémon the same year I had to say goodbye to my old friend of fifteen years.
"Too peaceful. I was at least hoping there'd be some aliens or something."
"Aliens, Glassie? Really? How likely is that, really?"
"No less likely that Sike jumping into bed with me last night or you being Ebon's sister, Edelweiss... oh, sorry, am I not supposed to say that out loud?"
Now, now. Sike is the one most likely to have a Biden Moment like that. Though, Glassie is enough of a shit-stirrer she might also say something like that.
The more I learn about Glassie, the more I like her. Can't wait to see her butt heads with Rainbow Dash, probably literally.
I have a little-known Flower Trio art piece that sums up Team Allure's policy towards unprovoked attack. I believe neocons call it "peace through superior firepower".
What else is there? Aside from bat-ponies, maybe... please tell me they'll appear in this!
The Pokémon will be ecstatic to learn that there are sexy bat creatures on Tellus because there sure aren't any where they're from. Yeech!
Please don't hurt her, Glassie. I've only known her for a little over a chapter, and yet, I already know Sike's too precious for words. Which goes to show how well you've already developed these four. Well done, Sempai!
I can't be senpai. You are senpai! Or Sempai. Whichever. At any rate, I have to say this is easily the best job I've ever done developing such a large team of characters in so little time. Sleeping Cobrox down below certainly agrees with your assessment!
Unfortunately, they quickly discovered that the bank and learned of old social media posts of theirs and froze their funds after an outcry.
Based and canceled!
"Smite them?"
"Sure, it's easy! Just use this:"
Consider yourself... admonished!
Now I resent that! My boi Ebon's erection is never illicit! It's a force of nature and always a beautiful sight to behold.
You got that right!
She gets some for the first time and now she's insatiable. Not counting any odd influences that might be having an untoward effect on her, of course.
"Crystal Heart Meth is not for everyone. Seek help if you have an erection lasting more than four hours..."
I feel like Equestria Mystery Dungeon is the completion of a time loop that started in 2014 when you wrote Five Star Service. It's as if the technology you were using then is something I've finally developed for my own use. Perhaps in ten years, I'll be where you are today!
Some real action and the promise of much more to come! Sike came around quickly. Now if we could see her overcome her fears and learn to fight... or maybe the pony she'll most identify with is Fluttershy...? Look forward to finding out either way!
Thanks for the longpost. I'm glad I could entertain you and look forward to your next entry!
And yet, there wasn’t a guard in sight, as if the treasure held no value at all.
Would Pokemon food or items hold any appeal to ponies? It's an open question. I suppose the berries would, at least, but things like elixirs or other hold items might not. Or maybe they would when ponies discover they can instantly recharge their magic?
The small room they were standing in was lined with wooden beams on the ceiling and floor that must have taken great care to hammer into place by either a pokémon with hands or a psychic-type.
I look forward to seeing their reaction to earth ponies grasping things with hooves and building structures without any digits or psychic abilities.
“That sounds reasonable. But we’ve already climbed fifteen floors and we still haven’t encountered anyone.” Sike pointed out towards the hall. “We should find something to sleep on and have something to eat.”
Or someone to sleep on...
The look Glassie gave Sike was as if the espeon had sprouted antlers.
Well, maybe the Ibex have an interest in this odd world as well!
His recently subdued erection began to creep back up again.
Creep back up to it's normal state again! Edelweiss will vouch for the fact that it's abnormal when he's not aroused!
“You’re all pretty tired and it will be dark soon,” Ebon started to pace the hallway slowly. “I’m sure it will be okay to sleep in your own rooms. I can take the first watch. If I need you, I’ll signal distress.”
"But if I don't, stay in your rooms and don't check up on us!"
Across from him, Sike put on the least-convincing smile Pokémon World had ever borne witness to.
Nice sentence. No description necessary; just let the reader imagine it.
“You bet your eleven inches you have, boss!”
Ebon uses Massive Cock.
It's super-effective.
“Don’t let it stop there if you’re willing. We trust you, Ebon. Now trust yourself and do what’s right.”
Said no human woman, ever. Thank god for Pokemon.
“You saw… everything, Sike.” Ebon’s eyes remained closed.
“More than you know, Ebon. I saw into the minds of Edelweiss and Glassie too.” His sensitive ears could just make out the gentle pattering of dainty paws as she crept closer. “I think… if we could all read each other’s thoughts, this would all be so much easier to talk about.”
“I’m afraid to ask but I have no choice,” Ebon was trembling slightly now. “Do you know about me and Edelweiss?”
That's cat out of the bag, Ebon! And worse, she's now sitting in front of you wanting very much to pounce your bones. And boner!
Sike pressed her body against his and for the first time he felt it. Softer than the finest silk and warm to the touch. The touch of an espeon.
I love this.
He opened his eyes and looked at her face. The orb on her forehead glowed softly with solar energy — the source of her great power.
She and Celly have something in common.
“Ebon, none of us has any idea whether you’ll end up with your sister or not, but she is genuine in her love for you. If you… do the, uh, thing… with me…” Sike groaned and smacked herself on the forehead. “That sounded so ridiculous, I might just die.”
No problem. Just pretend you're Joe Biden. He actually said that line.
“I think I know what you’re saying, Sike.” Ebon draped a leg over her shoulder and kissed the back of her ear at its base. “I believe you, Sike. I trust you. I trust all of you with my life.” He kissed it again, trailing his tongue across its considerable length.
It wouldn't be an AJA story without earplay!
A little harder. Make it hurt but just a little! Sike quickly fired back into his thoughts.
How much is a little? Your ears are super sensitive! Ebon thought back in some worry to her.
Enough to make me a little scared. Just try something! Sike was sounding really impatient now.
And now I just like Sike all the more. Adorable and needy and wanting to feel like she's being hunted.
That’s how it is, eh? I’m not letting you off that easily, Sike. Ebon got up and sat back down in front of her, stroking one of her ears in his paw. “You want me to work for it, don’t you? Don’t feel ashamed to ask better of me, Sike. I must do my best as your leader to take care of all of you.”
A good leader puts the needs of his subordinates before his own and wants to do right by then. You're not just a good Umbreon, but a good guy, Ebon. I'm really going to have to work some of this version of you into Feathered Hearts.
“I hope you’re ready for more. By the time I’m done with you, we’ll both need elixirs!” Ebon punctuated his words with another strong nip to her ear.
Hope there's a few in the room stores! They're going to need more than one by the time they're through...
But he wasn’t in any mood to mount her just yet.
Delayed gratification is also a strong sign of good character.
I had to train and get better so I could be my best for you, Sike. Ebon replied in a like manner.
An experienced lover makes all the difference, especially with a first-timer. They can make that all-important first time good.
“By Arceus himself, you’re a great fit!” Ebon said huskily. Most eeveelutions had a tough time handling his stature in the past to the point he’d actually been turned down a lot for sex.
Then you're going to love ponies, Ebon! You'll fit all of them; especially the alicorns!
“Who knows. Maybe she did!” Ebon replied. “It’s different for every female. I can lie and say you did if you want…”
“Ooooh yes! I like that idea!” Sike gushed gleefully, a contented silence falling between them as Ebon began thrusting his hips.
I'm not sure why she'd like that idea, but hey, Ebon's willing to lie for her! That's true friendship right there.
Sike’s will throbbed into his head, her thoughts urging him to nip and bite at the ruddy fringes of her immense ears, to sate her desire to taste but a small manageable pain to season the waves of pure pleasure like a dusting of hot powdered oran berries on a sausage. Sparks of fear triggered by primordial eevee instincts to flee hungry predators were followed paradoxically by sudden attachment to the source of her very fear.
Again, excellent description that gives a purpose to pain in a way readers can instantly understand. Pain can indeed accent pleasure. Hell, the two are very closely related. And the feeling of being stalked is often a strong-turn on, whether or not certain people would ever admit it.
I'll skip the rest in the comment only becuase it's explicit and I don't want to spoil it. You've got superb sexplay here and equally good detail on the scene. I enjoyed it immensely, and this story is off to a roaring start. Hey, Princess Cadance! What problem will you get thrown at this time?
Would Pokemon food or items hold any appeal to ponies? It's an open question. I suppose the berries would, at least, but things like elixirs or other hold items might not. Or maybe they would when ponies discover they can instantly recharge their magic?
It's valuable for the later stated purpose of feeding the Pokémon they hope to civilize but you bring up an interesting question that needs to be answered down the line. Might the ponies end up importing these resources to Equestria for their own use? Seems like a reasonable assumption, no?
We'll get more on that next chapter.
I look forward to seeing their reaction to earth ponies grasping things with hooves and building buildings with any digits or psychic abilities.
Don't underestimate normal-types! But yeah. They're in for huge shocks when they see how put-together pony society actually is.
Or someone to sleep on...
Ebon truly is the luckiest guy on Pokémon World. You ever wish I'd just go with a tragic backstory for once? I mean I come from Fallout Equestrian roots but I'm all sunshine on rainbows on paper.
Well, maybe the Ibex has an interest in this odd world as well!
"Is this an alien creature I summoned into my house or am I just profoundly drunk? And why do I want to have sex with it?"
Creep back up to it's normal state again! Edelweiss will vouch for the fact that it's abnormal when he's not aroused!
I have it in my head that Eeveelutions like him have basically zero refraction time until after a ridiculous number of rounds, owing to the adaptable nature of Eevee and his dark-typing.
"But if I don't, stay in your rooms and don't check up on us!"
Now that's stating the quiet part out loud. Biden would be proud!
Ebon uses Massive Cock.
It's super-effective.
And it can be used up to twenty times before needing to recharge!
Said no human woman, ever. Thank god for Pokemon.
If we didn't have fantasy females we'd be stuck with the real thing. And that would be a tragedy.
Sike pressed her body against his and for the first time he felt it. Softer than the finest silk and warm to the touch. The touch of an espeon.
I love this.
I love Espeon! They're everything Mew could have been.
“Ebon, none of us has any idea whether you’ll end up with your sister or not, but she is genuine in her love for you. If you… do the, uh, thing… with me…” Sike groaned and smacked herself on the forehead. “That sounded so ridiculous, I might just die.”
No problem. Just pretend you're Joe Biden. He actually said that line.
I swear this was not intentional! That doesn't mean it isn't hilarious in hindsight.
A good leader puts the needs of his subordinates before his own and wants to do right by then. You're not just a good Umbreon, but a good guy, Ebon. I'm really going to have to work some of this version of you into Feathered Hearts.
And by a wild coincidence, that story already has an "Ebon Umbreon!"
Then you're going to love ponies, Ebon! You'll fit all of them; especially the alicorns!
Sex tourism is best tourism!
I'm not sure why she'd like that idea, but hey, Ebon's willing to lie for her! That's true friendship right there.
I really should add another line to that.
I'll skip the rest in the comment only becuase it's explicit and I don't want to spoil it. You've got superb sexplay here and equally good detail on the scene. I enjoyed it immensely, and this story is off to a roaring start.
Thanks, Sensei! My sex has come a very long way since 2014. Hell, it's come a long way since 2020.
Sorry to not get to this last night as promised, but I’ll do my longpost on chapter 2 now.
My greatest contribution to fanfiction may yet be the term 'nest' to describe female reproductive equipment. And it works doubly good with pokemon, since 'pokenest' is a double-entendre in its own right.
Go, Ebon! This doesn't even need a scene description to visualize it.
"Actually, we didn't sleep at--"
"Ebon!"
"Er, uh, I mean... oh, hey, want some miltank sausage?"
Love it. And there's no nicer a sound than a purring cat.
"Too peaceful. I was at least hoping there'd be some aliens or something."
"Aliens, Glassie? Really? How likely is that, really?"
"No less likely that Sike jumping into bed with me last night or you being Ebon's sister, Edelweiss... oh, sorry, am I not supposed to say that out loud?"
The more I learn about Glassie, the more I like her. Can't wait to see her butt heads with Rainbow Dash, probably literally.
Be glad they're not coming to Tellus during the pony/griffon war, and the first things they meet are gryphon raider groups or harpie pirate clans.
What else is there? Aside from bat-ponies, maybe... please tell me they'll appear in this!
Please don't hurt her, Glassie. I've only known her for a little over a chapte, and yet, I already know Sike's too precious for words. Which goes to show how well you've already developed these four. Well done, Sempai!
Unfortunately, they quickly discovered that the bank had learned of old social media posts of theirs and froze their funds after an outcry.
"Smite them?"
"Sure, it's easy! Just use this:"
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Now I resent that! My boi Ebon's erection is never illicit! It's a force of nature and always a beautiful sight to behold.
She gets some for the first time and now she's insatiable. Not counting any odd influences that might be having an untoward effect on her, of course.
"Crystal Heart Meth is not for everyone. Seek help if you have an erection lasting more than four hours..."
Some real action and the promise of much more to come! Sike came around quickly. Now if we could see her overcome her fears and learn to fight... or maybe the pony she'll most identify with is Fluttershy...? Look forward to finding out either way!
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This is so true. Retrofitting my pony tools to work with Pokémon has been one of the more vexing challenges this sort of fiction and you my other fur-aligned prereaders have been instrumental in allowing me to branch out.
Smooth as butter! But his sense of decency and large penis allows him to overcome the occasional awkward moment with his beloved sister.
I understand well from long experience. I still miss my old cat I had to put down last year. My house is much easier to clean and far more sanitary but it's never been lonelier. I don't think it's a coincidence that I was drawn to Pokémon the same year I had to say goodbye to my old friend of fifteen years.
Now, now. Sike is the one most likely to have a Biden Moment like that. Though, Glassie is enough of a shit-stirrer she might also say something like that.
Glassie is based and Darwin-pilled.
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[Shoot them all video]
I have a little-known Flower Trio art piece that sums up Team Allure's policy towards unprovoked attack. I believe neocons call it "peace through superior firepower".
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The Pokémon will be ecstatic to learn that there are sexy bat creatures on Tellus because there sure aren't any where they're from. Yeech!
I can't be senpai. You are senpai! Or Sempai. Whichever. At any rate, I have to say this is easily the best job I've ever done developing such a large team of characters in so little time. Sleeping Cobrox down below certainly agrees with your assessment!
Based and canceled!
Consider yourself... admonished!
You got that right!
Too much pink energy is dangerous!
I feel like Equestria Mystery Dungeon is the completion of a time loop that started in 2014 when you wrote Five Star Service. It's as if the technology you were using then is something I've finally developed for my own use. Perhaps in ten years, I'll be where you are today!
Thanks for the longpost. I'm glad I could entertain you and look forward to your next entry!
Would Pokemon food or items hold any appeal to ponies? It's an open question. I suppose the berries would, at least, but things like elixirs or other hold items might not. Or maybe they would when ponies discover they can instantly recharge their magic?
I look forward to seeing their reaction to earth ponies grasping things with hooves and building structures without any digits or psychic abilities.
Or someone to sleep on...
Well, maybe the Ibex have an interest in this odd world as well!
Creep back up to it's normal state again! Edelweiss will vouch for the fact that it's abnormal when he's not aroused!
"But if I don't, stay in your rooms and don't check up on us!"
Nice sentence. No description necessary; just let the reader imagine it.
Ebon uses Massive Cock.
It's super-effective.
Said no human woman, ever. Thank god for Pokemon.
That's cat out of the bag, Ebon! And worse, she's now sitting in front of you wanting very much to pounce your bones. And boner!
I love this.
She and Celly have something in common.
“Ebon, none of us has any idea whether you’ll end up with your sister or not, but she is genuine in her love for you. If you… do the, uh, thing… with me…” Sike groaned and smacked herself on the forehead. “That sounded so ridiculous, I might just die.”
No problem. Just pretend you're Joe Biden. He actually said that line.
It wouldn't be an AJA story without earplay!
And now I just like Sike all the more. Adorable and needy and wanting to feel like she's being hunted.
A good leader puts the needs of his subordinates before his own and wants to do right by then. You're not just a good Umbreon, but a good guy, Ebon. I'm really going to have to work some of this version of you into Feathered Hearts.
Hope there's a few in the room stores! They're going to need more than one by the time they're through...
Delayed gratification is also a strong sign of good character.
An experienced lover makes all the difference, especially with a first-timer. They can make that all-important first time good.
Then you're going to love ponies, Ebon! You'll fit all of them; especially the alicorns!
I'm not sure why she'd like that idea, but hey, Ebon's willing to lie for her! That's true friendship right there.
Again, excellent description that gives a purpose to pain in a way readers can instantly understand. Pain can indeed accent pleasure. Hell, the two are very closely related. And the feeling of being stalked is often a strong-turn on, whether or not certain people would ever admit it.
I'll skip the rest in the comment only becuase it's explicit and I don't want to spoil it. You've got superb sexplay here and equally good detail on the scene. I enjoyed it immensely, and this story is off to a roaring start. Hey, Princess Cadance! What problem will you get thrown at this time?
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It's valuable for the later stated purpose of feeding the Pokémon they hope to civilize but you bring up an interesting question that needs to be answered down the line. Might the ponies end up importing these resources to Equestria for their own use? Seems like a reasonable assumption, no?
We'll get more on that next chapter.
Don't underestimate normal-types! But yeah. They're in for huge shocks when they see how put-together pony society actually is.
Ebon truly is the luckiest guy on Pokémon World. You ever wish I'd just go with a tragic backstory for once? I mean I come from Fallout Equestrian roots but I'm all sunshine on rainbows on paper.
"Is this an alien creature I summoned into my house or am I just profoundly drunk? And why do I want to have sex with it?"
I have it in my head that Eeveelutions like him have basically zero refraction time until after a ridiculous number of rounds, owing to the adaptable nature of Eevee and his dark-typing.
Now that's stating the quiet part out loud. Biden would be proud!
And it can be used up to twenty times before needing to recharge!
If we didn't have fantasy females we'd be stuck with the real thing. And that would be a tragedy.
I love Espeon! They're everything Mew could have been.
I swear this was not intentional! That doesn't mean it isn't hilarious in hindsight.
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And by a wild coincidence, that story already has an "Ebon Umbreon!"
Sex tourism is best tourism!
I really should add another line to that.
Thanks, Sensei! My sex has come a very long way since 2014. Hell, it's come a long way since 2020.