Twilight started to hyperventilate as she stared at the tiny white points sinking into the bright red gums of her bottom jaw, leaving no trace save for a few drops of blood where they had broken through the flesh. The dim light coming off her horn went out, leaving Twilight in darkness. She started to panic, feverishly scouring her mind for anything remotely similar to what was happening to her.
‘No no no.! Think Twilight. What have you done in the past month that might have caused your symptoms?’ she wondered, breathing heavily as she pressed up against the wall of the bathroom, sliding down the tiles and sitting on the ground. She buried her head in her hooves, closing her eyes as the metallic taste of blood swirled around in her mouth.
She slowly got back to her hooves and made her way over to her bed, levitating the ‘call nurse’ button and pressing it repeatedly out of panic. Five minutes of button pressing later, nurse Redheart entered, flinging the door open and flooding the room with light. Twilight turned away from her, shielding her eyes with her foreleg. Redheart walked up to her and snatched the button away, disconnecting it from the wall and throwing it on the bed. Twilight closed the door with her magic, letting out a relieved sigh.
“What do you want?” asked Redheart bluntly, raising an eyebrow at her. Twilight could tell that she was feeling bitter about the way that Spike had spoken to her. She scowled at the white unicorn, hopping up on the bed and sitting down.
“Is Doctor Neuron available?” Twilight asked and her scowl deepened as Redheart rolled her eyes. She nodded and left the room, flinging both doors open again in spite of Twilight. Only to them hit her in the behind as Twilight slammed them on her. A smile of satisfaction spread over the unicorn’s lips as her breathing became more relaxed as she nervously awaited the doctor. She lay down, resting her head in her pillow and concentrating on her breathing.
***
It wasn’t long before Doctor Neuron entered the room. He was much more considerate than Redheart, only opening the door enough for him to squeeze through. The same torch from earlier pointed at the floor in front of him. He rushed over to Twilight and put his hoof on her shoulder. Twilight explained what she had seen in the mirror, her voice shaking with fear and her eyes were welling up with tears. Doctor Neuron kept relatively calm as she spoke, listening intently and stroking her arm in an attempt to calm her down. When she had finished he pushed her down gently, telling her to lay down and relax. He pulled a smaller pen light out of his pocket and pointed it into Twilight’s mouth, while at the same time he used a depress to pull her lips back so he could examine her gums.
“Well they are a really bright red, but I can’t seem to see any sign of new teeth. I’d like to believe you, but I don’t see any evidence. I’m tempted to say that all you need is some food,” he told her, putting the pen light back into his pocket. He let out a long sigh, rubbing his eyes. Twilight took a long look at his face and the bright red tendrils that arced across the white of the eyes from the corners.
“Are you okay?” she asked and Doctor Neuron gave her a smile.
“Thanks for the concern. But I’m okay. Just very tired. There are only two other doctors apart from me working today, seeing over two hundred patients. I’m just grateful that you’re the worst of them. No offence,” he explained, blushing as Twilight raised an eyebrow. He got off the bed, throwing the used depress in the nearby waste bin.
“I don’t have any clue what could have caused the irritation of your gums. But I seriously doubt that you are growing a new set of teeth. It was probably just your eyes playing tricks on you,” he told her. Twilight nodded, understanding his disbelief. He smiled once more, before turning and leaving the room. Twilight looked around the dark room, her heart rate back to normal and thoughts of the fangs more or less gone from her mind; instead, it was replaced with a feeling of concern for her new friend.
***
Twilight shot upright in her bed, crying as enormous beads of sweat covered her body causing her mane to cling to her face. Her breathing was extremely heavy and she had no idea why. Whatever the nightmare had been, it must have been horrible. Her eyes darted around, searching for the source of the fear.
Twilight flung the covers off herself, walking over to the window and peeled back the thick black curtains that Neuron had put up to prevent any light from getting to her. The light of Luna’s moon hit her face and Twilight quickly shut her eyes, expecting pain, but was pleasantly surprised to discover that the white light had no effect on her. She reluctantly opened one eye and was greeted with the beautiful sight of the full moon. She moved her wet fringe from her eyes as she used her magic to open the window and took her first breath of fresh air in two days.
New and exciting smells invaded her nose as the peaceful sounds of night met her ears. Her breathing slowed as the intense feeling of fear subsided. Her stomach growled, begging for sustenance. Twilight sighed, looking at the barely touched tray of food that the nurse had brought in earlier and cringed. The mashed potato and steamed vegetables had done nothing but make her ill and she was much too scared to even try the ice-cream. Being confined to her room with not even a book to keep her occupied was starting to make her feel a little stir-crazy. She started to tap her hoof on the windowsill as the lights of Ponyville slowly being extinguished as ponies went to sleep.
Twilight took a quick look to make sure that none of the hospital staff was approaching before she charged her horn with magic, the perfect spell coming to mind. A magenta glow spread over her body as she concentrated on the sidewalk outside the hospital and teleported. A momentary flash of light accompanied her disappearance and reappearance on the street. She looked back at the hospital and was grateful that she had decided to teleport as the entire hospital was lit up like Canterlot during Hearth’s Warming. The pain behind her eyes was dulled, but still bad enough that her eyes watered. She looked down the street, taking a deep breath of cool night air, and started to make her way toward Ponyville, but made sure that she kept to the outskirts where the street lights were sparser than in the centre.
Twilight could see that the lights were still on in the library and smiled at the thought of Spike waiting up for her, reading some large book or writing a letter to Princess Celestia. She walked past it, heading for her favourite stargazing hill. When she got to the top, she lay down on the grass, and immediately set about searching for and identifying the constellations. Every single star in the sky felt like a beacon of imagination and peace, and she couldn’t help but get lost in the beautiful night that Princess Luna had provided. She managed to take her mind off the last few days of pain and frustration as she indulged in her favourite hobby.
***
In the distance, Twilight could see the great city of Canterlot stuck to the side of the mountain, the full moon illuminating the tall spires and the royal palace. She hoped that Spike had sent Princess Celestia, her mentor and ruler of Equestria, a letter explaining why she would be late in sending off her weekly friendship reports and finished assignments.
Twilight thought of her friends and how much she was beginning to miss them. She briefly thought about going to visit them, but remembered that it was the middle of the night and that they probably wouldn’t appreciate her knocking on her door. She got to her hooves and decided to make her way back to the hospital. The moon now sat high in the sky and made it very easy to see where she was going. She took the same path back, the library, now dark and uninviting with only a single light illuminating the street. The sound of hooves on the dirt in front of her jerked her out of her trance and she saw a light blue unicorn with a dark blue and white mane step out of the shadows.
“Hello Colgate, strange to see you out so late,” said Twilight and Colgate jumped at the sound.
“Oh, Twilight. You startled me. Yeah, I’m not too pleased about it. Berry had a bit too much to drink at Junebug’s party and I had to take her to the hospital to have her stomach pumped. I’m so tired, and what’s worse; I have to open up the clinic tomorrow morning,” Colgate told her, sighing as she explained a typical morning for Ponyville’s resident dentist.
Twilight, however, had long since stopped paying attention. Her ears were filled with the sound that she had heard before; the ‘thud thud’ that had been coming from Doctor Neuron previously now came from Colgate, along with a hypnotic muscle spasm that pulsated in her neck.
“Uh… Twilight, are you okay? Your lips are bleeding,” said Colgate, giving Twilight a strange look. Twilight cocked her head to the side and opened her mouth to reveal long, sharp fangs protruding from her top and bottom jaw. She let out a low growl as the light blue unicorn started to back away. Twilight looked more like a rabid timber wolf than a pony, the pupils of her eyes wide and all of her reasoning gone. All that was running through her mind was; feed.
Hopefully Twilight won't become overzealous and kill Colgate...
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We can only hope.
Second chapter! Hurray!
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The attack alone will cause damage to the psyche of twilight.
Oh, poo. Even if she does get cured, she's going to be all kinds of messed up.
awesome chapter now it's getting intresting please continue and if you could try to make the chapters a little longer!
Very good, it would be nice if you could get chapters out quicker though.
Was wondering when you would add a new chapter.
Also, second to last sentence about her pupils seems off.
That about sums up my reaction, in a good way. Well, as good as vampire-Twilight-murder can get.
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All the Chapters!!!
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There is no way that it couldn't..... Spoilers.
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Yeah I'm sorry about that. I wanted them all to be about 3000 words each, but I have been getting a bit sidetracked with other things I'm afraid.
1344743
I am trying, but Unfortunately, both myself and my editor are currently in preparation for University exams, and she hasn't got much time to look over my stuff until sometime near the end of October. So if I was to put out any chapters in the meantime, they wouldn't be very well edited.
1344921
Sorry about the wait, and might I ask what you mean?
Yay! Second chapter! I've been looking forward to this!
*Reads* Oh snap
1342716 Agreed poor Twilight may never forgive herself for hurting another pony
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I'm glad you enjoyed it.
1345961
"...the pupils her eyes wide and all of her reasoning gone."
Did you mean "....the pupils OF her eyes WENT wide..."?
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oh... Thanks. I didn't notice that and neither did my editor. That's embarrassing.
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Your welcome. :3
moar.
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No problem... well actually there is a problem. I have to wait until both my editor and I are finished with out exams, so some time near the end of October. Although if I were to put out a new chapter, it would be a bit terrible because of all the mistakes in it. Mostly grammatical, but still.
1346983 end of october = FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU!!!!!!!!!!
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I am sorry about that, but they are University exams, so.....
1347054 college brony? niicccccccccccccce... i am a high school drop out brony.
1347062
That's still cool.
1347078 huh?
1347093
Nothing wrong with that is what I was trying to say. My older bro is a high school drop out.
1347101 you are the first person who said there is nothing wrong with it, i have been being ridiculed for it, even though i was about to kill myself because of school, i still have people ridiculing me for it. like they dont care if i die, thats why i dropped out. i was about to. thank you
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I don't understand why it's such a bad thing. I have a family of eight and only two of us have ever finished high school. It might be an Australian thing though. And you would be very surprised to find out who actually WOULD care if you died..... trust me. I was in that position a long time ago.
1347145
Do tell, it sounds like quite a story.
1347729
What sounds like quite a story?
1347734
"And you would be very surprised to find out who actually WOULD care if you died..... trust me. I was in that position a long time ago."
This.
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Okay then. Well I lost my Mum to cancer about two years ago, and afterwards, my family started to fall apart. I seemed to be the only person actually trying as my Dad was so emotionally fucked. My little sister who was fourteen at the time started drinking, smoking and skipping school. She started seeing this guy who we found out was 22 years old, and we tried to get her away from him. So we had an intervention of sorts and I had to try to comfort her as I was the only person in the family she trusted. She tried to kill me with a huge rock to the head. I was lucky. As all this is happening I was just slowly getting more and more depressed, I kept thinking that no one liked me. One day I was talking to one of my friends and I revealed I was thinking of ending my life... She punched me in the face and proceeded to tell how much of an idiot I was and that I had people that cared for me and relied on me and so on. It came as a major surprise, but it did manage to make me see that killing myself was not the way to go.
That's the story. Not very interesting, but relevant.
I found it very interesting and inspirational. Thank you for sharing it.
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No worries.
Hey, I'll do editing work for you if you want another editor.
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That's very generous, but my editor and I have an arrangement. She edits my stuff and looks for grammar and the like, and I edit her stories, looking for better words to use and story elements that don't work. We work on each others weakness. So thanks, but it wouldn't be fair to her to get someone else. And I still have the problem that I have assignments and exams to finish and study for, so I don't have much time to sit down and write. I use all my spare time to do this story and my other series.
1347842 You're story is truely an inspiration. As Jackie Chan said in the 2010 Version of "Karate Kid" "Life can knock us down, but we can choose, whether or not to get back up again" In some ways Life has knocked me down. I lost 3 good friends inside of 2 weeks. But I chose to get back up again, to carry on and keep their memories alive, in my Heart, my Mind, and in my very Soul. As long as I can keep their Memories alive within me, then they are never far away, for they are always right by my side. So I hope this helps for those who Life has knocked down. Always stay strong and never give up. ;)
1348031 I figured it'd be somethin' like that, and rest assured that I have no intentions of undermining either of your efforts. Frankly, I think having a friend edit your work in exchange for editing theirs sounds like a pretty swell deal... Now if only I could actually write something. Ha!
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One thing that helped me through it all is when I read a single line; "From the Blackest night comes the Brightest day"
1349261
My writing professor once told me that the first paragraph is the hardest.
1352926 It really is...
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But by that reasoning, every one after that should be easy.... right?
1352962 Eh... Relative to the first, yes. In general? Well, I think that depends on how well you've thought out your premise, how well you've devised your character progression, and how good you are at writing in general (pacing, mood setting, and so on and so forth).
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That is very true.
1352977 Needless to say, I have both a tendency to ramble, and be impatient. Neither of these things are necessarily conducive to narrative efficiency or a lack of plot holes.
1352983
But the impatience can help if you write an action/adventure story.
1352987 True dat; and I love me some action/adventure, but I also like descriptive narratives. In any case, my issues are nothing some practice won't solve. I'm actually sitting on a one-shot that I need to finish... And a bunch of other stuff that I never finished... I should really go finish those...
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But it won't do any good to rush it. Just let it go at its own pace. Even if you are impatient.
1353000 Hmmm... At this point it's just procrastination. Hehe. The one-shot's a couple weeks unfinished, and some of the other stuff is from last year.