10934061 Thanks for the compliment. That's what I've been told I need to say.
10934064 Yeah, I really wanted to do more with Luna's character. She actually has a half written "companion reader" that is supposed to go with this, but I never finished it. One of the initial concepts was a POV story about this from Celestia, Luna, Cadence, and lastly Twilight. In increasing orders of "Shining has altered you. Pray he does not do so further..." But it was too grand a plan for my meager attention span. Then I was going to do it by bouncing between characters, including the mane 6. Then I was going to have three seperate stories, this one, Luna's, and Twilight Velvet's. That's where I started writing. I made the most progress with Celestia, and she was the most "aware" and appalled about it, so I stuck with her. Velvet's was just fucked up, tbh. Was gonna be her dealing with a foal that was waay to sexually aggressive, and culminate in him blackmailing her into leaving him in charge of the newly born Twilight. Then I realized I did not want to write that out, so if I did it would be lots of cut-aways and fade to blacks. Then I wasn't super interested, and Celestia's just sort of stuck... The more you know.
10934271 10934450 Celestia has an unfortunate reason she cannot put her foot down. She has made a correct observation. It is a terrible, terrible thing, but it is. Yeah, Twilight and Luna were being butts. I wanted to convey that Twilight was having a full blown "Twily-nanas" situation in the scene, but that Celestia didn't know her well enough to identify it. Up until this point, she has been spending her time with Twilight teaching Twilight and not properly observing her. Celestia legit does not understand Twilight, and this particular Twilight is very alien to her. I wanted to spend several chapters with her, past this point, exploring and discovering that Twilight is actually "worth her time" and then some. Before then, she's lying to Twilight about not feeling disgust, and says as much to the reader as I try to make her a somewhat reliable narrator. Luna is just being an ass.
I dunno. Maybe I should set the status to incomplete. The story is complete. It's just not posted. Hmm...
10934481 Thanks for the comment! If anything, this proves that I haven't gotten any better at writing. In a lot of ways, I feel worse. I go back and read some of my older bits, and I actually like them (I love the end to my weird starbound story), but I can't really abide my "modern" stuff. Even more so, I go back to the same themes. I'm writing a story about dragons (heavily D&D inspired) and the main character was too much like "this" Celestia. All my fetish stories involve some type of captivity situation, (Not always MF, but always got a F in there) and the plot lines are very similar. In short, my writing is stale...I need to write something very different again. Hmm...
10935108 I think the status tag really applies to the fic as it exists on the site, rather than whether it’s already typed out and awaiting publication. I previously saw the Complete tag and for a minute thought that was it, before I read your earlier comment about upcoming chapters. The tag’s really for letting readers know whether or not to await future chapters. So I definitely advise changing it to Incomplete until all chapters have been posted.
Also, this meta question occurred to me earlier: Is Celestia actively (or passively) prevented from doing anything that would interfere with Shining’s plan, like with the fates conspiring to make sure she stays in her lane, perhaps by tweaking her thoughts or sapping her willpower? Or is her inaction all her, and she could indeed fry him into a crisp if only she decided to?
This chapter is when I started wondering why Celestia doesn't roast him. Because he finally is getting in Celestia's face about corrupting her specifically. Obviously she explicitly considers it, but something about appealing directly to her selfish desire strikes me as what would cause Celestia to reflexively fight back.
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Thanks for the compliment. That's what I've been told I need to say.
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Yeah, I really wanted to do more with Luna's character. She actually has a half written "companion reader" that is supposed to go with this, but I never finished it. One of the initial concepts was a POV story about this from Celestia, Luna, Cadence, and lastly Twilight. In increasing orders of "Shining has altered you. Pray he does not do so further..." But it was too grand a plan for my meager attention span. Then I was going to do it by bouncing between characters, including the mane 6. Then I was going to have three seperate stories, this one, Luna's, and Twilight Velvet's. That's where I started writing. I made the most progress with Celestia, and she was the most "aware" and appalled about it, so I stuck with her. Velvet's was just fucked up, tbh. Was gonna be her dealing with a foal that was waay to sexually aggressive, and culminate in him blackmailing her into leaving him in charge of the newly born Twilight. Then I realized I did not want to write that out, so if I did it would be lots of cut-aways and fade to blacks. Then I wasn't super interested, and Celestia's just sort of stuck... The more you know.
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Celestia has an unfortunate reason she cannot put her foot down. She has made a correct observation. It is a terrible, terrible thing, but it is. Yeah, Twilight and Luna were being butts. I wanted to convey that Twilight was having a full blown "Twily-nanas" situation in the scene, but that Celestia didn't know her well enough to identify it. Up until this point, she has been spending her time with Twilight teaching Twilight and not properly observing her. Celestia legit does not understand Twilight, and this particular Twilight is very alien to her. I wanted to spend several chapters with her, past this point, exploring and discovering that Twilight is actually "worth her time" and then some. Before then, she's lying to Twilight about not feeling disgust, and says as much to the reader as I try to make her a somewhat reliable narrator. Luna is just being an ass.
I dunno. Maybe I should set the status to incomplete. The story is complete. It's just not posted. Hmm...
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Thanks for the comment! If anything, this proves that I haven't gotten any better at writing. In a lot of ways, I feel worse. I go back and read some of my older bits, and I actually like them (I love the end to my weird starbound story), but I can't really abide my "modern" stuff. Even more so, I go back to the same themes. I'm writing a story about dragons (heavily D&D inspired) and the main character was too much like "this" Celestia. All my fetish stories involve some type of captivity situation, (Not always MF, but always got a F in there) and the plot lines are very similar. In short, my writing is stale...I need to write something very different again. Hmm...
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I think the status tag really applies to the fic as it exists on the site, rather than whether it’s already typed out and awaiting publication. I previously saw the Complete tag and for a minute thought that was it, before I read your earlier comment about upcoming chapters. The tag’s really for letting readers know whether or not to await future chapters. So I definitely advise changing it to Incomplete until all chapters have been posted.
Also, this meta question occurred to me earlier: Is Celestia actively (or passively) prevented from doing anything that would interfere with Shining’s plan, like with the fates conspiring to make sure she stays in her lane, perhaps by tweaking her thoughts or sapping her willpower? Or is her inaction all her, and she could indeed fry him into a crisp if only she decided to?
This chapter is when I started wondering why Celestia doesn't roast him. Because he finally is getting in Celestia's face about corrupting her specifically. Obviously she explicitly considers it, but something about appealing directly to her selfish desire strikes me as what would cause Celestia to reflexively fight back.
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It's not stale, it's consistently good. If anything, it's more refined and polished than your earlier works.
Ah, I love this conversation between Shining and Celestia.