interesting fic, but one minor nitpick is the oc's fighting skills seems inconsistent to me. I mean he was able to hold his own against Rainbow and Applejack, yet he didn't seem that strong against Pinkie and Fluttershy. Sure you could justified it by saying Pinkie got lucky with a few good hits and he underestimated Fluttershy, but those aren't quite enough for me. If he is able to win against Applejack by outlasting her, I doubt most of the other girls would stand a chance against him. I understand if you wanted to write a powerful female fantasy fic and there's nothing wrong with that, but the faulty inconsistent way you wrote your oc's fighting skills kind of ruins it for me.
10889669 Rainbow: You lost to fluttershy. Alex: And I was able to hold my own against you for a while, so what does that say about you? Rainbow: Yeah, well...
10889684 So, you don't really think much about the fights and who should win, you just write them and the winner is decided by whatever ends up happening, correct?
10889687 Sadly, I don't think anyone has made one. The closest I can think of was the fic https://www.fimfiction.net/story/351129/always-the-quiet-ones and the match was a joke at the very end, which we didn't even see and could only infer what was happening with three lines of dialogue.
10889705 That explains it. I still stand by my first comment and don't agree with that way of doing it, but to each their own. At least he did get one win so far, against Applejack of all people. I wonder how she would react to the fact Fluttershy managed to beat the guy she couldn't. Though to be fair you can't exactly compare her match with the others so far, since wrestling is completely different than a straight up fight.
10889720 I would not let him live that down. Now, if fluttershy were to pull a Hinata and hit all his pressure points, then that would be understandable.
10889915 Before today's update I was actually worried Fluttershy would somehow knock him out in one hit. Who knows how the rest of the fights will go, since the writer admits he doesn't really think about who should logically win.
10889930 Not really. From what I could gather from his reply, he just writes out a random fight scene and whatever happens, well happens. Even if it doesn't really make sense compared to other fights, ie lasting an hour against rainbow or 30 minutes against Applejack, but getting knocked out by Pinkie pie. Heck I remember the Rainbow chapter noting that he has endurance and can take a hit, yet that was forgotten during the Pinkie pie chapter. That's the main problem I have with this fic, though I can let it slide, since it seems to be a silly fun one.
“I’m not a child Alex so don’t treat me like one.” She said in a surprisingly forceful voice. “I want to wrestle you, I want to wrestle you and afterwards I want to fuck you until you can’t stand straight. I will admit I was hesitant at first, but as Rainbow Dash says, this will help me get out of my comfort zone and assert myself.”
If that didn't get me blushing/turned on...her choice of wrestling "attire" did.
Damn, first pinkie pie and now fluttershy. How is he gonna live this down?
interesting fic, but one minor nitpick is the oc's fighting skills seems inconsistent to me. I mean he was able to hold his own against Rainbow and Applejack, yet he didn't seem that strong against Pinkie and Fluttershy. Sure you could justified it by saying Pinkie got lucky with a few good hits and he underestimated Fluttershy, but those aren't quite enough for me. If he is able to win against Applejack by outlasting her, I doubt most of the other girls would stand a chance against him. I understand if you wanted to write a powerful female fantasy fic and there's nothing wrong with that, but the faulty inconsistent way you wrote your oc's fighting skills kind of ruins it for me.
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With Rainbow Dash as his girlfriend? Probably Never.
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able to hold his own against applejack, but gets knocked out by Pinkie and forced to tap out by Fluttershy.
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Rainbow: You lost to fluttershy.
Alex: And I was able to hold my own against you for a while, so what does that say about you?
Rainbow: Yeah, well...
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Lol 😂 that’s funny I never thought about it that way.
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He better hope wallflower blush has that memory stone, because I can’t see him living this down any other way.
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Now I wanna see rainbow dash vs fluttershy.
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So, you don't really think much about the fights and who should win, you just write them and the winner is decided by whatever ends up happening, correct?
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Sadly, I don't think anyone has made one. The closest I can think of was the fic https://www.fimfiction.net/story/351129/always-the-quiet-ones and the match was a joke at the very end, which we didn't even see and could only infer what was happening with three lines of dialogue.
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Essentially
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That explains it. I still stand by my first comment and don't agree with that way of doing it, but to each their own. At least he did get one win so far, against Applejack of all people. I wonder how she would react to the fact Fluttershy managed to beat the guy she couldn't. Though to be fair you can't exactly compare her match with the others so far, since wrestling is completely different than a straight up fight.
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Interesting.
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I would not let him live that down. Now, if fluttershy were to pull a Hinata and hit all his pressure points, then that would be understandable.
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Before today's update I was actually worried Fluttershy would somehow knock him out in one hit. Who knows how the rest of the fights will go, since the writer admits he doesn't really think about who should logically win.
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So he basically flips a coin to see who wins?
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Not really. From what I could gather from his reply, he just writes out a random fight scene and whatever happens, well happens. Even if it doesn't really make sense compared to other fights, ie lasting an hour against rainbow or 30 minutes against Applejack, but getting knocked out by Pinkie pie. Heck I remember the Rainbow chapter noting that he has endurance and can take a hit, yet that was forgotten during the Pinkie pie chapter. That's the main problem I have with this fic, though I can let it slide, since it seems to be a silly fun one.
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That actually makes a lot of sense.
If that didn't get me blushing/turned on...her choice of wrestling "attire" did.
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Lol