As Alex had expected, when he told Rainbow Dash how the fight with Fluttershy went, she had busted out laughing, saying that he had been doing bad these last few matches. The laughing stopped when Alex reminded his girlfriend that he had lasted longer with her than Fluttershy, which said more about Rainbow than it did about him. Alex went to bed with a black eye that night.
While I like that you used a joke I made, I am a little unsettled at how you showed their relationship as abusive. If you intended it as a joke, I don't find it funny and it's just plain wrong. If one little jab is enough for Rainbow to hit him than they shouldn't be together. I'm not telling you how you should write, but this is just too unsettling. At least have Rainbow called out and learn to work on her behavior. At least he won against Rarity, with the most fun way to boot.
10903440 I'm just happy he got another win. Now he just has to win the next two to have more wins than losses, no pressure. He might win against Twilight, but i'm not so sure about Sunset.
10903458 I meant it seemed like you were blaming him for the abuse, when the blame should be on Rainbow. I will be frank that kind of ruined this story for me. I will continue reading it since it's almost done. At least it most likely is. There is probably just chapters for Twilight and Sunset and maybe an epilogue.
10903472 one hit ko? Never mind saw you edited your comment lol. Also sorry if I sounded ungrateful that you added a joke I made into this. I am happy and grateful you did. I just found Rainbow's response incredibly unsettling, but I can try to look pass it.
10903483 It would have saved him from potentially getting dominated by the rest of the girls and avoid dealing with his prone to violence girlfriend, but on the other hand he would have missed out on his victory on Rarity, which is his best one yet.
While I like that you used a joke I made, I am a little unsettled at how you showed their relationship as abusive. If you intended it as a joke, I don't find it funny and it's just plain wrong. If one little jab is enough for Rainbow to hit him than they shouldn't be together. I'm not telling you how you should write, but this is just too unsettling. At least have Rainbow called out and learn to work on her behavior. At least he won against Rarity, with the most fun way to boot.
I’ll be honest, I was expecting rarity to judo throw him.
10903432
Well, he’s known rainbow dash for years so he should’ve known what he was getting into. Maybe it’s just another fetish he has?
10903441
It doesn't and shouldn't excuse it though. I'm sure it's not your intention, but it really seems like you are victim blaming.
10903440
I'm just happy he got another win. Now he just has to win the next two to have more wins than losses, no pressure. He might win against Twilight, but i'm not so sure about Sunset.
10903443
It’s ok, I can see why you think that because you can only read the comment. I didn’t know there was a victim to begin with.
10903444
If he loses to sunset, then it’s time to either drop out or transfer.
10903458
I meant it seemed like you were blaming him for the abuse, when the blame should be on Rainbow. I will be frank that kind of ruined this story for me. I will continue reading it since it's almost done. At least it most likely is. There is probably just chapters for Twilight and Sunset and maybe an epilogue.
10903462
If he can live after losing to Fluttershy than I'm sure he can survive losing to anyone else.
10903444
Yeah Sunset will be last and it’s going to be one hell of a brawl
10903472
one hit ko? Never mind saw you edited your comment lol. Also sorry if I sounded ungrateful that you added a joke I made into this. I am happy and grateful you did. I just found Rainbow's response incredibly unsettling, but I can try to look pass it.
10903470
Honestly, I wouldn’t be surprised if he masterbated after she gave him the black eye.
10903471
He should’ve already skipped town after that.
10903472
Really?
10903482
oh god I did not need that mental image lmao.
10903485
You didn’t think he would?
10903483
It would have saved him from potentially getting dominated by the rest of the girls and avoid dealing with his prone to violence girlfriend, but on the other hand he would have missed out on his victory on Rarity, which is his best one yet.
10903490
I don't think about what other guys tend to jack off to. Geez that's just... I can't even describe it.
Are you going to do a sequel to this, just with the Dazzlings and/or the Shadowbolts?
10903493
Probably because rarity didn’t put up much of a fight.
10903494
I wouldn’t say it’s something you need to think about.
10903521
I was talking more about how he won by having sex lol.
10903523
Ok lol. Those kinds of thoughts tend not to occur to me at all, so I didn't even consider him doing that.
10903527
Ok, that makes sense.
10903530
Makes sense.
10903513
I’d have to rewatch those movies before doing that, it’s been a while