I really like this story so far. The formatting and flow need work, but that's just a matter of practice really. I'm definitely interested to see where this can go.
10791927 The best way I can describe your writing style would be 'one-line walkthrough'. Every thought or sentence tends to be separated onto it's own line. It's not bad per se, but it's a bit hard to read.
Generally, you want to split your writing into readable chunks no more than ~10 sentences (or 1-2 paragraphs) long. That's not to say you want a wall of text. Again, it's about readability.
But more importantly than that, have good separation between narration and dialogue. You want to be able to see when the world around you is changing versus when conversation is happening. Finding that balance is tricky and takes a while.
Very nice! Loved it!
Though, you seem to have forgotten a space here
I really like this story so far. The formatting and flow need work, but that's just a matter of practice really. I'm definitely interested to see where this can go.
10791898
Oh okay thank you very much ^^
10791910
Thank you ^^ yeah i havnt found my style yet and try to Experiment a bit.
Anny Tips or suggestions?
10791926
You're welcome!
"He's a Batpony Mohawk." Says in a Mr. T voice.
10792577
huehuehue okay that got me good xD
i could hear Mr.T loud and clear xD
I've fallen inlove with this story it's amazing and I can't wait to see whats next
10792651
This is something of the kindest things someone ever said about something i made.
Thank you so much
10792971
Your welcome
Interesting.... I will stay for the changling love
10791927
The best way I can describe your writing style would be 'one-line walkthrough'. Every thought or sentence tends to be separated onto it's own line. It's not bad per se, but it's a bit hard to read.
Generally, you want to split your writing into readable chunks no more than ~10 sentences (or 1-2 paragraphs) long. That's not to say you want a wall of text. Again, it's about readability.
But more importantly than that, have good separation between narration and dialogue. You want to be able to see when the world around you is changing versus when conversation is happening. Finding that balance is tricky and takes a while.
10793249
I see. I will try to adapt your Tipps. Thank you ^^
good story, needs editing
i've loved your ART <3!!!!
11210073
I will give the compliment to the artist ^^