The sole survivor of a unintentional mass genocide gets thrown into a new world with all the powers and abilities he's ever wanted and more. However, this new world is in dire need of a hero. This is the story of how Logan Boil saves an entire planet
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I would like to read more.
Imma need more chief
Now I have to wait another chapter to get the fight scene... right?
I would love more
11160467
What fight scene? He has a year to prepare
Your writing is okay. Maybe get someone to read over it before you post it and if there are some things unclear between you just try to explain what you want to say in basic and simple terms so your helper or better proofreader will have the possibility to get the point across you want to portray with other wording maybe more colorful even.
For example. Some writers go into something a character said and only use he/she said that. Which is a bit boring and repetitive. Instead you can use sites like thesaurus.com, I think it was, to get synonyms for those words.
And it goes from "I have this and this plan yadda yadda." He said to ...yadda." he detailed, his voice shaky, hands gripping the map table with plans for the siege.
Just a few little ideas.
Hope that helps and you can confidently continue.
Dragon
dude pls bring this back. honestly I think the plot of this is great and I love were it's going. and your writing is good, yeah needs some improvement here and there but that only happens the more you write. I really hope you bring this back cause I'd love to read all of it.
Wait you stopped writing this? Since when? Cause I didn't see anything that said you stopped?
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