Not bad so far, if a bit rushed. For the POV changes, I recommend this: keep the first person format for Krampus and when it switches to someone else, switch to third person. It's easier to keep track of things that way.
Shouldn't the fall moon celebration be winter moon celebration? The longest night of the year IS the winter solstice after all with its opposite the summer solstice, the longest day of the year hence the summer sun celebration. Or maybe you want to keep the season of winter a distinct belonging of Krampus? Then again I dont see why you chose fall even though it is a great season.
10441824 Actually I honestly was basing the "fall" moon celebration for the longest night of the year or winter solstice and honestly thought it was in the fall. I'm forgetful about a lot of things because I work nights and my internal calendar is very messed up so thank you for pointing out a substantial flaw. I plan to edit this and the chapter I'm working on so it has a correct timeline
10442087 That's no problem we forget stuff sometimes god knows I have the memory of a goldfish. Should I also mention that the winter solstice is very near to Christmas which is why I thought you were going to make it Krampus' celebration. That or you can make it so that since Luna and Krampus are friends they decided to have their festivals near each other or on the same day since Christmas doesn't technically exist and it's called hearths warming eve and in no way associated to the Krampus
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Fixed this last week just forgot to let you know, I get busy and forgetful, so hopefully it's better
this is going along nicely
I Just pictured Krampus singing the boogeyman sond XD
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Lol
Not bad so far, if a bit rushed. For the POV changes, I recommend this: keep the first person format for Krampus and when it switches to someone else, switch to third person. It's easier to keep track of things that way.
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Definitely a very good idea, like I've said this story was to learn and expand my knowledge so I could be a better writer
Shouldn't the fall moon celebration be winter moon celebration? The longest night of the year IS the winter solstice after all with its opposite the summer solstice, the longest day of the year hence the summer sun celebration. Or maybe you want to keep the season of winter a distinct belonging of Krampus? Then again I dont see why you chose fall even though it is a great season.
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Actually I honestly was basing the "fall" moon celebration for the longest night of the year or winter solstice and honestly thought it was in the fall. I'm forgetful about a lot of things because I work nights and my internal calendar is very messed up so thank you for pointing out a substantial flaw. I plan to edit this and the chapter I'm working on so it has a correct timeline
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That's no problem we forget stuff sometimes god knows I have the memory of a goldfish. Should I also mention that the winter solstice is very near to Christmas which is why I thought you were going to make it Krampus' celebration. That or you can make it so that since Luna and Krampus are friends they decided to have their festivals near each other or on the same day since Christmas doesn't technically exist and it's called hearths warming eve and in no way associated to the Krampus
I really like this and am looking forward to more.
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I'm glad you like it and I hope to not disappoint