Though you kinda fade out right as things are getting really steamy. What is this, some kind of ... actual storytelling, more than mindless smut? What's up with that? :)
Indigo supposed that that made Principal Cadence spackle. Something pink and goopy that would fix the problem and hopefully harden with time.
I … I don’t have the words to voice my reaction to this sentence existing.
Anyway, finally starting this one. Loving it so far, especially how you portray the different students’ personalities. All I saw of Crystal Prep was from Friendship Games itself – I avoided all the shorts – so I don’t know how well they compare to canon, but I’m enjoying them here.
Only nitpick I had with the story so far was how forced everyone’s refusal to heed Cinch’s warning was. I understand she needed to be ignored for the plot to progress, but it feels kinda contrived when the new principal of the school refuses to listen to advice about dealing with the literal portal to hell in the basement because she’s in a tiff. Nothing that isn’t easily overlooked, though.
10573079 The thing about being the human version of the Princess of Love is that your emotions get away from you now and again. As for the folks at CHS, they either know Cinch as a perennial annoyance or the cause of Midnight Sparkle. No charity to be found there either. Still, next chapter, Cadence will start really appreciating the mistake she made there.
Anyway, I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I admit, I borrowed a good chunk of the Shadow Five's personalities from other fanfics. Even with the half-hour special, they don't get much in canon to work with.
this is honestly super fun to read just in terms of being a story, let alone for the fun of seeing sexy girls have fun with other sexy girls. u do such a great job of capturing the girls' voices and personalities while also being clever enough to handle the snark of 5 separate snarky, funny characters. i lost it at the pyramus and thisbe thing lol
10738623 Wonderful! Alway nice to hear that the more esoteric jokes landed, and that the story's enjoyable to read even independent of the clop. Thanks for the feedback.
Frosty Orange snapped her hand back down, pale blue locks whipping back and forth as she looked at the whole class looking at her. "Um…” She bit her lip. “What does make you go to Hell?"
Plot twist: she doesn't ask that because she doesn't want to go to hell, but rather because she wants to go there.
Exactly. So, before we face Twilight, we're gonna build those friendship muscles." Lemon went into the classic Rosy Riveter pose for emphasis.
They're so gonna fuck.
“Rhetorical question for you, Sugar. And come on, girls. There are three kinds of people in the world: Masturbators, aces, and liars.” Lemon paused and scrunched her nose.
Actually two kinds. And, if you dig deep enough, we're all wankers here.
"Probably easier to get out of her hair.” All eyes turned to Indigo Zap, who flushed red and tried to shrink in on herself. “N-not that I would know."
"Do I have... you in my hair?" - the exact circumstances of me hearing that probably qualify as TMI.
"How thin is this wall?" said Sunny.
Sugarcoat raised an eyebrow. “How long is his penis?”
It was in this moment that Sugarcoat realised two things: that she was not a robot and that she really had to talk to Trenderhoof about... poetry.
I feel I laughed at that a little too hard.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Excited to see this apparent Succubus go full orgy on the school.
I can tell you had fun writing this one. What was the title of the second movie, Scion of the Ur-Porn?
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Nothing quite like overextending a metaphor in a way that works far too well.
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No, but there is a certain eminence to it, isn't there?
Pr0n!
Though you kinda fade out right as things are getting really steamy. What is this, some kind of ... actual storytelling, more than mindless smut? What's up with that? :)
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Heresy, I know. Half the fun is in the journey. The other half is what and who you get to do at the destination, but we're not there yet.
I … I don’t have the words to voice my reaction to this sentence existing.
Anyway, finally starting this one. Loving it so far, especially how you portray the different students’ personalities. All I saw of Crystal Prep was from Friendship Games itself – I avoided all the shorts – so I don’t know how well they compare to canon, but I’m enjoying them here.
Only nitpick I had with the story so far was how forced everyone’s refusal to heed Cinch’s warning was. I understand she needed to be ignored for the plot to progress, but it feels kinda contrived when the new principal of the school refuses to listen to advice about dealing with the literal portal to hell in the basement because she’s in a tiff. Nothing that isn’t easily overlooked, though.
Looking forward to seeing what’s next.
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The thing about being the human version of the Princess of Love is that your emotions get away from you now and again. As for the folks at CHS, they either know Cinch as a perennial annoyance or the cause of Midnight Sparkle. No charity to be found there either. Still, next chapter, Cadence will start really appreciating the mistake she made there.
Anyway, I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I admit, I borrowed a good chunk of the Shadow Five's personalities from other fanfics. Even with the half-hour special, they don't get much in canon to work with.
this is honestly super fun to read just in terms of being a story, let alone for the fun of seeing sexy girls have fun with other sexy girls. u do such a great job of capturing the girls' voices and personalities while also being clever enough to handle the snark of 5 separate snarky, funny characters. i lost it at the pyramus and thisbe thing lol
10738623
Wonderful! Alway nice to hear that the more esoteric jokes landed, and that the story's enjoyable to read even independent of the clop. Thanks for the feedback.
Love this interpretation of Sour Sweet, she always was my favorite of the bunch!
Plot twist: she doesn't ask that because she doesn't want to go to hell, but rather because she wants to go there.
They're so gonna fuck.
Actually two kinds. And, if you dig deep enough, we're all wankers here.
"Do I have... you in my hair?" - the exact circumstances of me hearing that probably qualify as TMI.
It was in this moment that Sugarcoat realised two things: that she was not a robot and that she really had to talk to Trenderhoof about... poetry.