The touch of this red crop, holds the power to change the one it is touching; on a specific part, or the entire body. It only depends on how and the affectionate touch. A Mystery-item, the charmed Fetish is the key.
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I think I found it, and I have read this before. I was reading it, as I had red your point.
While I can follow your point, but I can't quite agree.
Based on this short segment; I can see how you think.
If I assume you were saving space, rather than writing properly this was a good scene.
Maybe you are not such a bad writer as you think?
In the explisit example, it would. Though it is not about punching the reader in the guts I am aiming for.
Placing details in the tag by the dialogue is something I commonly do, even if I do get some complaints about this.
I try to use the entire formate, in rder to paint the picture. from the minute details, to the broader scene.
Thank you. It is. I appreciate, when someone takes the time to try to formulate something constructive. Even if I may fail to express it, on occasion. Partially do to how the comment may have been worded.
If only more readers could take the chance and try to write down a few short lines, before they hae the entre story. You never know, maybe your comment saved your overal experience before it is too late?