Oh god...i must read this...
Edit:Ok i have to say that was pretty good,Thumbs up.

Me gusta.

Hmmm... I've read stories of Twilight creating her own clones before and having similar situations. Perhaps the Lunas and Twilights should get together.

Or.. Create more clones and enjoy that. **Imagines dozens of Lunas running around the castle**

lmao

that was an awesome speedcloop fic

Oh man. This line,
"It had taken some time to get used to having four holes to use instead of just two, but[...]"
I laughed so damn hard. Great work on the whole thing. Straightforward, funny, sexy, everything you need for a good speedclop.
Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

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I'm not into clop-fics, but i actually like it.

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Nice fic

Fun fact: I finished Portal 2 (Single Player) on the 16th: three days ago. Nice fic, bit short though, but it's speedclop so that's to be expected. Well done nevertheless.

Yes.... just yes.

Yes to all of this.

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Waaaaaaaait a second.
*looks at the top of the page*
Chapter 1
1
1
1
1
1
There is more?
Aaaaaaaaaaw yeeeeeah1

Bronydragon

the internet is for porn.
this just proves it even more

ts:df

Too short: didn't fap.

Make it longer.

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Not sure if yay or worry.
Must not end now.
The possibilities! The possibilities!

Bronydragon

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Since she is playing with a clone of herself made from herself, would it be counted as mastrubation or self clopping?

1119643 wat.

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now your thinking with portals!

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They are, but I'm not sure what they call it in this. It's like having two different words meaning the same thing but depending on where you're from is what you would call it

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well we didn't need that image.
a picture of a boob is all thats required.

1126520 danke shon* for agreeing with me

*note: danke shon is german for thank you very much*

I'll write a longer comment than my usual style of "Yay, I liked your story!", because...I dunno *shrugs*.

What I liked:

"Now that she had scoured her entire friend list..."
I laughed at this, and that makes me a horrible person.

"...get used to having four holes to use instead of just two."
That right there, that sentance right there, is comedic genius.

"..this wasn’t romance, it was something much purer."
*snickers* Purer? I dunno about that. Giggity =P

What I...well, didnt like would be wrong, um...minor potential development points maybe?
*shrugs*:

"But..."
This is just me here butt school they told us never to start a sentance with "But" (or "Because") and I know you're big on grammar.
Dont know whether you care about this or not. Easy to change it to "However" but it's nothing big *shrugs*

"...this very second. After a second.."
My personal preference would be to change one of these words to a synonym, like "moment".

"...while her twin held her head still while continuing to suck..."
Like above, repetitive words just irk me for some reason, maybe the second part would be better as "and continued to suck"?

"...out a throaty moaned.."
Moan.

Overall:

I liked the "theme".
Luna is best Princess, so Luna selfcest is a win in my book.
I liked that it didnt just jump into the clop.
Granted there wasn't major romance or story development, but there was enough of a background there for it to have at least some foundation to work on.
The horn play was done well.
The oral sex was a bit brief and jumped to focussing on the clitoris very quickly, but I recognise this is speed clop so it slides.
I'm also a fan of wingplay/preening, so I was disappointed there was none of that, but again, speed clop cant have everything.
If you plan on writing anything longer I assume you'd include more foreplay etc
Overall very good job on this mate.

go fuck yourself luna

LOL, For a moment there, I thought you trolled me! With the whole, play some co-op portal. NICE JOB, SIR!