Aunt Flutterbitch
Cheerilee, the school teacher in Ponyville, gave her class an assignment: tell a story with a moral at the end of it. The next day foals came back to school and one by one began to tell their stories.
Little Hoof said, "My father was a farmer near Hoofington before we moved to Ponyville and we had a lot of egg-laying hens. One time we were taking our eggs to market in a basket on the front seat of the coach when we hit a bump in the road and the eggs went flying and broke and made a mess."
"And what's the moral of the story?" asked Cheerilee.
"Don't put all your eggs in one basket!"
"Very good," said the teacher. "Now, Royal Blue. Tell us your story."
"MY family are farmers too. But we raised hens to sell them on the market. We had a dozen eggs one time, but when they hatched we only got ten live chicks. And the moral to this story is, don't count your Scoot... chickens before they're hatched."
"That's a fine story Royal Blue," said Cheerilee. " Sweetie Belle, do you have a story to share?"
"Yes, my sister Rarity told me this story about aunt Fluttershy . It was when Discord was released. After the first failed attempt to defeat Discord, aunt Fluttershy didn’t go straight back home. She was possessed by Discord's chaotic power of violence and she wanted to find and hurt a specific Griffon that had wronged her in the past. But it was long way to Griffon Kingdom and she is bad long distance flyer, so she bought some ale for the trip-”
“It makes long flight less exhausting,” Interfered Scootaloo.
“Unfortunately just outside Ponyville she was caught by a chaos chocolate storm and had to crash land in Diamond Dogs territory. She drank the ale, on the way down, so it wouldn't break and then she crash landed right in the middle of one hundred chaos frenzied Diamond Dogs troops. She Stared seventy of them to death, then she killed twenty more with the tail whip and then killed the last ten with her bare hooves. Afterwards she was so tired she returned home where she was caught by Apple Bloom's sister Applejack and cured of chaos possession by aunt Twilight's magic."
"Merciful Celestia," said Cheerilee, "What kind of moral did your sister tell you from that horrible story?"
"Don't piss off aunt Fluttershy when she's been drinking."
The end made me laugh alot. At first i was like Then i was like Finally i was like
Best moral ever!
P.S
Little Hoof - suddenly I'm envisioning a ponified apatosaurus
Damn right!
Awesome.
lol.
Aunt Fluttershy?
I THINK I AM GONNA BRING MY BFG10K.
Also, why I thought about showing Twilight the heat death (ie. one of the theories about the end of universe)?
I had a good laugh.
"don't count your Scoot... chickens before they're hatched.""
I lol'd.
I really just laughed.
Funny.
Haven't laughed so much at a story with a moral since Ren and Stimpy was around.
So true!
What did you just say?!
Nothing! N-nothing at all...
hahahahahhaha, o silly me flutterbitch is just a fictional character
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Oh man that picture was awesome,
Nice little read, took thirty seconds or so.
4 starts for you
Cheers
~iraqlobstah
Thanks ppl. I'm glad you like it.
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Sorry for spelling and grammar mistakes. I'm non-native English speaker, but I'm doing my best to improve.
You, sir, are a gentleman
"Don't piss off aunt Fluttershy when she's been drinking."
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There! 19 RainLOL Dash's to follow yours.
Great story!
Not Bad
Made me have a good laugh, you should make more of these
OH GOD! LOLOLOLOL!!!!!!
That's a terrible moral!
WHAT?!
I-I mean that's an awesome moral!
but seriously, very funny story here!
I'm not much of a prereader, but I am an American, so let me help you out with some of your mistakes.
The next day filly’s came back to school...
That should be foals, filly's refers only to young female ponies (also, it would be fillies, filly's denotes ownership)
Little Hoof said. "My father...
You would use a comma, not a period, so it would be: Little Hoof said, "My father...
...ten live chick.
It should be chicks, not a big deal
"That's a fine story Royal Blue," he continued.
Umm, I'm not sure what to say here. I'm assuming this is Cheerilee, so it would be she, but Cheerilee wasn't talking previously, so it would either be "said Cheerilee" or maybe "she commented." Something like that.
"Yes, my sister Rarity told me this story about aunt Fluttershy . It was when Discord was released. After first failed attempt to defeat Discord, aunt Fluttershy didn’t went straight back home. She was possessed by Discord chaotic power of violence and she wanted to find and hurt a specific Griffon that have wronged her in the past. But it was long way to Griffon Kingdom and she is bad long distance flyer, so she bought some ale for the trip.”
Just gonna make a list:
*After the first failed
*didn’t go straight home
*Discord's chaotic
*that had wronged
Since Scootaloo interrupts her, you might want to end this with a -, i.e. "'...bought some ale for the trip-'"
“It makes long flight less exhausting.” Interfered Scootarlo.
You want a comma there and Scootaloo
...one hundred chaos frenzy Diamond Dogs troops. She Stare to death seventy of them, then she killed twenty more with the tail whip and then kills the last ten with her bare hooves. After words she was so tired she returned home where she was caught by Apple Bloom sister Applejack and cured of chaos possession by aunt Twilight magic."
*frenzied
*Stared seventy of them to death
*then killed the last...
*Afterwards
*Apple Bloom's
*Twilight's
Anyway, great story, really funny. I hope this helps!
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Big thanks, from a humble Polish-Brony. You deserve a mustache good sir. Your corrections have been added. I hope you will not be offended if i would send you this kind of short stories for proofread, if I would come with more of this kind of silliness?
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I would love to proofread for you. You're very funny and I would be honored.
P.S. Thanks for the mustache!
*pfft and snicker*
uh..
why is it taged dj bron3 if shes not in this
Hmm, interesting. I always imagined Fluttershy as a teetotaler.