a good story, however your phrasing needs some work. had to re look over parts multiple times just to understand the concept you were trying to convey.

When you can tell from the title that there will be spelling errors everywhere it's a bad sign. You literally misspelled Rainbow Desh's [sic] name.

How could she bite her lip with a cock in her mouth? When did they get into position for a blowjob? Who's thighs did he move when he sat on the bed? The others brought up some good points too.

The pressure of her vagina on the top of her head had pushed her further up the roof.

Um... What?

I mean no disrespect, but how in the world has this got 64 likes? Words are repeated, there's spelling errors everywhere, there's odd diologue, and the sex scene just makes zero sense.

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You're right. I set my sights low on this one, but not low enough.

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This is a problem of modern content. There are many people for whom English is not their native language and their knowledge of the language is below average. Nevertheless, even so, we generally understand each other.