1089171 it's not even really focused on steampunk, I just really enjoy the style and wanted to implement steam power to add a bit of badassery to the story and a recognizable style.
I like the premise, and read the ending first, so I have to say I like the idea. It needs a bit of editing to be a really good story, though. I've seen a few typos, but there are also style errors that would be harder to find. I won't report them, but you can PM me if you are truly interested in rewriting this, and I can help find them.
There are also a few things that are rather impractical using steam, even with magic, but I'll just write those off and call it "soft" magic (see Sanderson's scale of magic systems).
and here's chapter two, I hope I improved a bit on the wall of texts but explanation needed to happen a bit.
This looks awesome
Loving this story and i don't normally enjoy steam punk pony stories so A+ for you.
1089171 it's not even really focused on steampunk, I just really enjoy the style and wanted to implement steam power to add a bit of badassery to the story and a recognizable style.
Spike is a little too casual about all thisdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Vinyl2.png
I like the premise, and read the ending first, so I have to say I like the idea. It needs a bit of editing to be a really good story, though. I've seen a few typos, but there are also style errors that would be harder to find. I won't report them, but you can PM me if you are truly interested in rewriting this, and I can help find them.
There are also a few things that are rather impractical using steam, even with magic, but I'll just write those off and call it "soft" magic (see Sanderson's scale of magic systems).