A foreign prisoner and a young general, enemies united by a forbidden power. To win an endless war, Twilight Sparkle will make a pact that will change fate but will the changes be what she wishes?
“I’m no better… using bombs to blow up a castle thinking the only one hurt would be their princess, of course, there were children and others inside a place like that… I was such a fool and now all either of us has is each other. I lost my family, best friend, and even the support of my people what little they ever offered. But then I look at her, she lost her friend, mentor, family, status, and is bonded to a being she was raised to fear and kill. I wonder how she can even sleep…” He touched the unicorn’s mane and moved it from her eyes before standing and stretching. “Dragons are said to be able to live entire generations should they survive. I could have been nearly immortal but now…” He looked down at the chain that reflected the moonlight despite not truly being real.
I think you should change " I was such a fool and now all either of us has is each other" to " I was such a fool and now all we have are each other" and "... and even the support of my people what little they ever offered. " to " and even the support of my people after what little they have ever offered. "
9739144 True but they are a few days away from Canterlot and lost in the Everfree if you wanted to hide a peaceful village why not hide it in the shadow of a bigger target and hidden in the one place that the dragons and ponies never cared to ever attack.
good here my comment about ep really this story is very good colleague interesting the spike say that the dragons have an order of power by force they remember certain barbarian tribes of europe and you can see that the poenis in this geurra are also pretty brutal next to the dragons and just imagine them catching the eggs or the dragons themselves breaking the eggs make my heart break in half and too cruel that mate and hydra really is one of the most feared magical beings in this universe apparently, after all she can make her head grow, produce poison And what made Celestia and Luna leave their former dwelling? and cool stuck a hidden city of this bloody war
hmm, convenient that such a village would exist and that they were close by.
I think you should change " I was such a fool and now all either of us has is each other" to " I was such a fool and now all we have are each other"
and "... and even the support of my people what little they ever offered. " to " and even the support of my people after what little they have ever offered. "
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True but they are a few days away from Canterlot and lost in the Everfree if you wanted to hide a peaceful village why not hide it in the shadow of a bigger target and hidden in the one place that the dragons and ponies never cared to ever attack.
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Thank you! I'll change it
good here my comment about ep
really this story is very good colleague
interesting the spike say that the dragons have an order of power by force
they remember certain barbarian tribes of europe
and you can see that the poenis in this geurra are also pretty brutal next to the dragons
and just imagine them catching the eggs or the dragons themselves breaking the eggs
make my heart break in half and too cruel that mate
and hydra really is one of the most feared magical beings in this universe apparently,
after all she can make her head grow, produce poison
And what made Celestia and Luna leave their former dwelling?
and cool stuck a hidden city of this bloody war
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Hmm I may show the Castle of the Two Sisters and the reason it was destroyed later as to make them leave it would be a huge deal