Good chapter, looking forward to the next one! Though I do not understand why Celestia is so adamant about being with Jack. I mean yeah, he is the only one capable of getting Alicorns pregnant, but come on Tia, he has a will of his own and a life he wants to live, you can't force him to do anything. It would go against everything you stand for, jeez lady.
Yeah, you best be prepared. Cause war is coming, and Sweet Apple Acers is going to be scorched in Celestia's wrath. Jack better come up with a way to stop her, before she stops us all. Also, check your spelling cause I noticed a lot of your errors.
I really enjoy this with the plot, setting and that it has my fav of the Main Six and I hope AJ can forgive Luna, aka next Princess ever, and I’m hoping she’ll get in the relationship with Jack and AJ.
10100078 So, I have a question... Can I take this out of my Cancelled list with intent to read a complete version? I don't really read Incomplete stuff, so I have not read this, but I have had this in my list for ages.
10487068 I have written before, but even if I hadn't I still know how to pre read and check myself as well as taking pride in what I do. Everyone makes mistakes, but if you wanna be a sloppy ass writer and not even take the time to read over what you write before posting then that shows you dont care about what your posting. As I said before, if the writer doesn't care why should we? I'm not gonna be some Yes Man and keep patting some guy on the back knowing what hes doing is shit. It makes you look like shit for advocating being lazy.
I looked at her as she looked at my cigarette. “Something that’s going to kill me someday.” I truck the match and lite the cigarette then took a long breath then pulled the cigarette and blew out the smoke. I sighed as I looked at the red embers. “This stuff helps me relax after a long day.” I looked back at her and she didn’t seem to mind the smell. “You got something like this?”
I highly doubt it will affect you anymore, considering you're a Alicorn now.
Celestia stood up and I noticed a gun similar to mine on her side. “Getting brave.” With a dark smile, she looked at me. “I’m here to make a point Jack. As long as I’m alive I will be in your life as a friend or as an enemy.” I put my gun away walked up to her and before she could realize what was going on I snatched her gun popped out the bullet cylinder out then dropped the gun. “Get out!” I used a cold tone clearly scaring her and Luna stood up grabbing her sister then in a flash of light they were gone. I was clenching my fist so tight a few drops of blood fell. I took a few deep breaths and unclenched my fist. I sat down beside Applejack and grabbed the food and drinks out of the air as everyone seemed to settle back down. After a few minutes, the movie started up as Applejack leaned into my side. I chewed on the popcorn and watched as this Nightmare Moon destroyed the minds of crawl and evil ponies who would harm the young. Two hours quickly passed as the movie ran on. When it was done we left the hall Applejack half asleep as we walked, With a smile, I picked her up and she blushed as Ponies laughed as I carried her as my bride.
Either Celestia loses her throne or loses her head/life.
I put the stick down and she gave me her full attention. “You and your sister came on way too strong. Your sister crossed a line and I will have nothing to do with her but you. I can work with you, Luna. You tried to make right a wrong for which there is no making right but you tried. Your actions speak higher of you than your words.” She smiled as she looked at me then spoke in a softer tone.
“Friends?”
I gave her a kind smile then tipped my hat to her. “Friends.” She smiled then stood up and started to walk away.
“Applejack?”
I stopped as the world around me and I looked over to see a very nervous looking Luna. I narrowed my eyes as I glared at her. “What do you want?” She put her hands up as she looked at me.
“To talk is all Applejack, you are the element of honesty and we need you to help protect everypony in Equestria. And, I know with what we’ve done I’m asking a lot of you but I’m not asking for your forgiveness not will I. We took a member of your family from you. We scared your family which is something I fully expect you to never let go of.”
“Oh, don’t get me started on that! You two took our Granny the oldest member of our family.”
I started to tear up as I looked at her my anger giving way to sadness. “The mare who was Applebloom’s only mother figure and the strongest mare I knew.” I pulled my hat down as tears rolled down my face. A second later Luan wrapped her arms around me and I wanted to scream and kick but all I could do was wrap my arms around her. She rubbed my back as I started chucking up as I started to cry harder in the airs of a mare I once thought of as kind and as a friend.
“It will be ok Applejack and I promise we will make restitutions for what we have done. If you or your family ever needs anything I promise we will get it.”
I only nodded then pushed her off as I looked at her through my tears. “Nither I or my family want anything from you two! We want to left alone from you two!” She flinched and I glared at her for a moment then turned my back on her. “Get out of my dreams and stay out.” A few seconds passed in silence then she spoke.
“Very well Applejack, but know my offer is always open.”
A few seconds later she was gone and everything turned back.
“Say, Jack, can I ask you something?”
“Hm?” She looked up at me and we stopped as the light of the un was fading fast.
“Did Luna come into your dream too?”
I frowned then nodded as I started walking again Applejack looking sad.
“She was a good friend you know. She was a kind pony who just wanted ponies to love her night as much as they did Celestia’s day.”
I looked down at her as we walked down the road. “Do you want to forgive her?” With a nod, she spoke in a sadder tone.
“Yes and no, I’ll never let go of what happened with granny but I’m one of the closest ponies to Twilight throne. I will have to deal with her and Celesta a lot more before it’s over.”
I nodded and then rubbed her hand with my thumb. “I understand it’s hard to deal with forgiveness as sometimes it’s hard to deal with one after it’s all said and done.” She nodded as we walked into the town and saw many ponies heading to the hall.
I feel mixed on whether if Jack, Applejack, Mac and Applebloom will truly forgive Luna.
And when does Twilight and the others finally learned what happens and confront Celestia about it. What about Cadence too?
Good chapter, looking forward to the next one!
Though I do not understand why Celestia is so adamant about being with Jack. I mean yeah, he is the only one capable of getting Alicorns pregnant, but come on Tia, he has a will of his own and a life he wants to live, you can't force him to do anything. It would go against everything you stand for, jeez lady.
I dont recall Southern Wind, is he from an earlier chapter? Or perhaps his old horse from the human world, maybe an Indian name?
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the third one I have a plan for Celestia and I need one more guy but trust me you'll love what I have planned.
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Lol, how convenient that Indian names make great pony names.
By the way, what kind of pony is Southern Wind? With the lack of description, I can only assume Earth Pony?
Yeah, you best be prepared. Cause war is coming, and Sweet Apple Acers is going to be scorched in Celestia's wrath. Jack better come up with a way to stop her, before she stops us all. Also, check your spelling cause I noticed a lot of your errors.
Can't wait for the next chapter to come out.
I really enjoy this with the plot, setting and that it has my fav of the Main Six and I hope AJ can forgive Luna, aka next Princess ever, and I’m hoping she’ll get in the relationship with Jack and AJ.
Update?
10100078
So, I have a question... Can I take this out of my Cancelled list with intent to read a complete version?
I don't really read Incomplete stuff, so I have not read this, but I have had this in my list for ages.
10487068
I have written before, but even if I hadn't I still know how to pre read and check myself as well as taking pride in what I do. Everyone makes mistakes, but if you wanna be a sloppy ass writer and not even take the time to read over what you write before posting then that shows you dont care about what your posting. As I said before, if the writer doesn't care why should we? I'm not gonna be some Yes Man and keep patting some guy on the back knowing what hes doing is shit. It makes you look like shit for advocating being lazy.
I highly doubt it will affect you anymore, considering you're a Alicorn now.
Either Celestia loses her throne or loses her head/life.
I feel mixed on whether if Jack, Applejack, Mac and Applebloom will truly forgive Luna.
And when does Twilight and the others finally learned what happens and confront Celestia about it. What about Cadence too?