I thought that if it's hard to feel happy, then death would be a better option....If only i can understand how much my own life is not worth throwing away.
This is pretty well written so far got a few mistakes that plague even more veteran writers like using "here" instead of "her" or even towards the end at:
...no one knows who or let alone what it maybe and that their...
When the words "may" and "be" were jammed together. Overall for a first attempt at writing it was pretty high up there for fanfiction.
Gripping my head with one hand, I finally managed to get my eyes to open and what I saw made time feel like it just stopped for a moment. "Where did I.....how did i get here!?!" I mentally shouted as about thirty two hundred meters out was what looked to be some kinda of bright sunny kingdom right in the middle of this frozen wasteland.
When i see this quote i IMMEDIATELY Know your going to have potentials!
Great start. You have a lot of potential here.
A very interesting start. I look forward to what the future brings. Take as much time as you need to flesh out your ideas.
Also I love the title of this chapter. It sounds like an epic one-liner from an action movie.
Hey, this is a pretty interesting read. Not bad for your first story.
Wow this is amazing. I'm on the edge of my seat and I can't wait till the next chapter.
This is nice. I like the story.
This is pretty well written so far got a few mistakes that plague even more veteran writers like using "here" instead of "her" or even towards the end at:
When the words "may" and "be" were jammed together. Overall for a first attempt at writing it was pretty high up there for fanfiction.
When i see this quote i IMMEDIATELY Know your going to have potentials!