When over 6800 humans in 12 teams play paintball using restored and/or recreated weapons of war for the entertainment of the masses find their way into Equestria with their equipment. chaos shall ensue
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Where did the third plane come from we have 2 call signs. Till that last line it sounds like there are 2 planes
Another nice chapter.
It was rather slow and nothing much happened, but what happened was great.
But how did they managed to get runways up in Appleloosa?
Non the less, keep up the good work ^^
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That was my terrible writing in its finest. I did mention there was a number of aircraft on the runway. But the perspective of this chapter was following that of B17 'Cattlecar' and Lancaster 'Galloping Gurney' and spoilers. Their going to be stars in the next chapters and quite a few more, that third plane is an offhand escourt, since the B17 was having trouble and the bomber crews are new to this land, the leadership took shinings advise and assaigned each flight a P61 blackwidow as an additional measure to ensure they dont get lost. The P61 is a twin engine heavy night fighter, she has radar and her back seat is currently occupied by a pegasus whos giving directions.
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Who said the appleloosans had runways?
Thank you for the review. From the writers perspective the story he/she writes feels two dimentional often enough. So its difficult to tell a good story speed and what not.
Truth be told i spent the first 10 chapters feeling like i was going way too fast...
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I just assumed, because they will have to land on something right? Or can this machines land on the desert without problems?
True, You either feel you don't go fast enough or you feel like you are rushing XD. It is hard to find the right speed and rhythm, but many times you just think it is rushed/to slow and readers find it just right ^^. But I must say,better to slow then to fast. When you end up to fast people will feel rushed and it gets confusing fast. And worst of all, people won't be able to feel like they can sink inside the story, this is the best way I can describe what I mean just now XD. Hope you know what I want to say.
But you have the right speed and it is a blast to read it.
9611861 Seen one of black widows or at least a fighter very simular at the National Air force museum. As escort makes sense truthfully
9612066 On sand not so much packed earth sure the smoother the better. Still would be a rough landing and there is nothing to say something hasn't been prepared
Good lord I haven’t heard that song in quite a while. I was gonna saybit takes me back to my high school days, but I don’t think it’s that old.
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Titanium was around when i was back in school...
I've personally had plenty of moment to remember that song by...
The Royal Melbourne Show. especially when i shouted my best mate there before he moved to south Australia.
Avalon airshow.
My graduations...
my sisters wedding...
Good times...
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There’s usually a good song to associate with something memorable in our lives.