• Published 4th Mar 2019
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A Knight's Undoing - NotaPonyPerson

Shining Armour is forced to watch Sombra make a harem out of his family.

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Comments ( 10 )

His smile spread as he bowed his head. "You have my word as a king. Twilight will not be my queen should I have you~"

You know there is a lot of grey area in "Not be my queen" and Sombra knows it.

I do hope we get to see a dragon being bred in this story also!

It was a pleasant surprise to see this story updated. Nice chapter, though I wish Night Light was involved in it personally. Hopefully you will find some use for him in the future.

A bit of warning for the next chapter of this. It's gonna be fucked up. I plan on making it as depraved and as sickening as I can imagine.

For this kind of story, that's the proper way to go. Looking forward to it.

That being said, I think you could really benefit from a proofreader. Way too many errors. I will still read next chapters even if they are in a similar state, but it would be nice to see improvement.

If you know someone whose good at it or know errors I couldn't see, feel free to Dm me them and I'll correct them as soon as I can. Always wanna deliver the best in my writing. But I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far!

Great story! I'm enjoying ever moment of this! Question; You think you'll do a part where he gets the other main characters or side characters?

Liking the expansion of Shining's psychological torture and the interaction/backstory about Equinox. Twilight Velvet's scene was even better with the sacrifices she had to make. Poor Cadance can't seem to catch a break in these sorts of fics!

Please continue this story!

Even flurry heart?

Well written indeed :twilightblush:

Hope to see this finished. Great work!

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