Very Fastly.
I... I don't even know where to start with this... you need commas, you need to capitalize the 'I's when the narrating character refers to himself, and for love of Frost, please just put the next chapter through some form of a spellchecker.

just for the theme, you got a thumb up.

One word for the situation he is in BUGGER!

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For the love of frost?
Never heard that one before.

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My phone doesn't do it automatically so i need to do it myself. And sometimes i forget to do it.

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well of course you haven't; you're not living in my head, after all
...or are you?

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I...
Don't think they are.

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And how would you know? What if you're living in my head too, and you don't want me to know because if I knew I'd try to flush the lot of you freeloading pricks out?!?!

nice

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...huh
good point.

(COME ON! You know what a pip-boy looks like do i really have to describe it? And also i couldn't get a pic because the world is fucking me in the ass)

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Your welcome!

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Thank you
My phone doesn't work
And just to let you know a new chapter is coming up on this story.

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*DIES FROM EXCITEMENT* "Hello this is Trixie. I must now revive my human sorry!"

it's okay, but so many grammatical errors

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Hey! I am not that good of a writer! And to add, this is only my third story. I know i need practice... But i am writing here just for the fun if it.