Considering Innocence offered Sunset a glass of female lubricant in front of her two guests and they didn't react to it negatively in any way, I'm going to assume that her behavior is normal.
Alright I liked this at first but I don't think I'm going to continue reading this last chapter and this chapter kind of ruin it for me and you had something good going at first well anyway hope your story does well but I'm going to dip.
God, at first I was thinking that this fic had the premise of the real Sunset being replaced (merged) with a human who stopped her, now on the quest to bring Sunset’s tormenters to justice. I was very interested. Now I have the feeling this story develops into the same direction as many other fics which were promising at first, but went down to “porn / smudge fic” levels of quality. And what’s up with this hyper nympho called “Innocence”?
And the first part of the chapter was confusing as hell. Clover? A kitsune? The mane six, or it sounded like them, in the background? I was more confused than anything else while reading it, sorry.
Or already this part:
"Is she going to be alright?" Fleur De Lis asked warily.
Innocence nodded, "Yes, she will be once she takes a drink of my fruity vaginal juice I saved up for her! Not only that, but all the aphrodisiacs I spiked inside it will definitely light her body on fire! She won't be able to stay asleep after drinking my homemade Elixir of Youth!"
Fancy Pants turned to the less insane maid for answers, "Do you know what happened to my little friend?"
It felt like I entered an entirely different fic. And nobody bat an eye at the fact that a “maid” said something you would only encounter in cheap porn.
Considering Innocence offered Sunset a glass of female lubricant in front of her two guests and they didn't react to it negatively in any way, I'm going to assume that her behavior is normal.
Cant believe i forgot about this little gem in the making! Glad it came up in my feed again
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You should meet the rest of her family! They are all special in their own unique ways. ;)
I cant wait to see how Sunset is going to react to Twilight
Alright I liked this at first but I don't think I'm going to continue reading this last chapter and this chapter kind of ruin it for me and you had something good going at first well anyway hope your story does well but I'm going to dip.
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Sorry to see you go. It is going to get serious in the upcoming chapters. So, maybe you'll be surprised?
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Alright I'll give it a couple more chapters and see where it goes.
God, at first I was thinking that this fic had the premise of the real Sunset being replaced (merged) with a human who stopped her, now on the quest to bring Sunset’s tormenters to justice. I was very interested. Now I have the feeling this story develops into the same direction as many other fics which were promising at first, but went down to “porn / smudge fic” levels of quality. And what’s up with this hyper nympho called “Innocence”?
And the first part of the chapter was confusing as hell. Clover? A kitsune? The mane six, or it sounded like them, in the background? I was more confused than anything else while reading it, sorry.
Or already this part:
It felt like I entered an entirely different fic. And nobody bat an eye at the fact that a “maid” said something you would only encounter in cheap porn.
Because its totally safe to be on the same planet your casting this attack on