A human from earth will have to learn how to live in a world that is not his own.
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Something that's quickly becoming distracting: improper use of apostrophes. You don't need an apostrophe for a plural word (eyes, hats, ponies, etc), only when showing possession or using a contraction.
Also, minor detail, but it's "Pinkie Pie," not "Pinky Pie". Far less important than the other issue, but still noticeable.
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Thanks. I need to go through this one day with a fine tooth comb and get rid of all those execs apostrophes.
This was a great chapter. All the appropriate emotions were captured and the dialogue was interesting. Only thing I could think of to add to it would be more inner thoughts of the main character. Well done
I was going to make a comment about MC making Dash explain the soap situation, but then he admitted that he was the one who introduced the joke to Dash. Sorry, bro, but you asked for her to use the joke simply because you taught it to her. Blank check right there.
im just kinda confused everything is going so fast, like when did he even talk about dropping the soap etc