Not bad, I am getting interested where this is going. Good chapter btw.

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Thanks! i spent two days trying to even get it readable.

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I have one tip though. Try to make the first Chapter as good as you can even make it. The first part is the most important in an Story, believe me, I lost many possible readers when the first chapter of my Story was really bad.

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Believe it or not, chapter 0 went through six re do's, not just editing but also erasing the whole chapter several times to make it even slightly look good.. it took two weeks, I also only started writing this because I really want more gamer fics and then imagined that there may be people like me, waiting for a new gamer fic to come out... but no one came, so i guessed i'll try making something others could enjoy and not just myself!

Oh and sorry to hear about your story's first chapter, it probably happened to mine too :).

Is good story so far, give me more.

Please keep going there's not enough gamer fanfic in the fandom.
Plus loving where this is going.

I love the story I can’t wait for it to update

I felt some what heavy, perhaps it was caused by the iron chains surrounding my entire body, the chains on the dildo on my forehead felt even more heavy. like they doubled it's mass compared to the rest of the of these fucking chains.

Okay this is a weird way to start a story... AND WHAT THE FUCK IS HAPPENING HERE?!

Dexterity can give you the speed of a cheetah and the reflexes of someone who seems to have a sixth sense, maybe if you spend enough points into this one you may actually get a sixth sense!.

This one sounds like a coward stat, it could help if you're blind or couldn't see how fast your opponent was swinging his or her sword.. actually maybe dodging isn't all that bad it probably hurts a lot less that's for sure.

Excuse me, I'm about to choke a bitch.