Will this story have any m/f sex scenes, implied or otherwise, where the woman does most or all of the work?

"Big Mac, I wouldn't ask this if you if I didn't think you'd make a great father," Sugar Belle said with a smile as she looked back at the stallion. "I love you and I want to bear your foal..."

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8974546 Oops.

8974459 Not sure yet.

Hey there! A quick writing tip, if you permit me:

When characters address one another in dialogue, put a comma before the name. That makes it much easier for the readers and helps avoid misunderstandings! For example, there's a big difference between

"I want to come inside Rainbow Dash!"

and

"I want to come inside, Rainbow Dash!"

Hm... it's a little quick, but I like the character interactions. Too much shipping early on, eh. The only real problem I had was when Sunset changed her mind to go investigate, Twilight assured her that it was probably nothing. Hadn't Sunset been reassuring Twilight before that?

Wow, that was something.

Just a minor nitpick, if I may:

The pair was now almost completely indistinguishable from their human selves,

I believe you meant "unrecognizable", it makes more sense in this context.

Otherwise, we seem off to a promising start. Can't wait to see what happens next.

8975374 Wow, that was embarrassing, I fixed it.

8975020 I wanted to get the ships out of the way to focus on the story itself. I actually am addressing the Sunset issue in chapter 2, the short version is that its a side effect of the magic that's at play here.