Grifter pony Strange Mirror has a gift — when ponies look at her, they see only what they want to see. Then one wonderful evening she meets a pony who loves her for who she truly is. It could ruin everything.
She sat in the stall longer than she needed to, thinking. It wasn’t too late to escape out the bathroom window — it was small, but Mirror was skinny. It looked like she’d fit. But she was actually having a good time! A better time than she’d had in ages. She liked to think of herself as a pony who loved to be alone, but it did get old. This was like something in one of her romances novels. A mistaken identity. A meet cute. It could go places. Wonderful, exciting, dangerous places.
It actually took me to the other pony banging on the stall door to realize she went to the bathroom. Even with the 'when I come back' line. Maybe add 'bathroom' to the part at the beginning there? "She sat in the bathroom stall longer than she needed to."?
Also 'A meet cute' Uh what? Either that's a typo, or a phrase I've just never heard before.
it had been so long that Strange Mirror had forgotten they ones they’d taught her in magic high school
Pretty sure that's suppose to be a 'the'
(Also hi, really enjoying this, but when I enjoy something I tend to point out errors. Hope it's not annoying.)
It actually took me to the other pony banging on the stall door to realize she went to the bathroom. Even with the 'when I come back' line. Maybe add 'bathroom' to the part at the beginning there? "She sat in the bathroom stall longer than she needed to."?
Also 'A meet cute' Uh what? Either that's a typo, or a phrase I've just never heard before.
Pretty sure that's suppose to be a 'the'
(Also hi, really enjoying this, but when I enjoy something I tend to point out errors. Hope it's not annoying.)