How much of a grammar Nazi do you need i see misspells and undecided ends to sentences but i hesitate to complain because i used spellcheck on 11 words so far and i suck at grimmer on my own this is my first comment on this site so pleas tell me the proper way to inform you of the needed alterations hind site is after all perfect, and don't ask for punctuation advise as you can see i don't write much but i read too much. written at 11:26 2/8/18
8721356 usually on this site, most just quote and then state the correction, along with an optional pleasantry such as "I hope this helps" or something along those lines.
if it's something people make a mistake on quite often such as "to, two, and too" you might point the general rules.
as long as you're not rude, most don't mind the help.
The stallion nodded hesitantly, then handed her a paper, so she can verify her presence between the palace walls and stepped away from her way, need to chose ether (out of her way) or (away from her) if you wont to express his subconscious acceptances to authority I would suggest adding (a respectful distance) before either choice as for the other things I see you got them I am enjoying your work so ill move on.
you need an editor- bid city, stood in a hill, I shouldn't be thinking about how many errors there are before the end of the second paragraph.
You also struggle a lot with tell instead of showing, which makes it very hard to believe things you tell us. You drop details that could make the story interesting, and then move on without giving them the attention they deserve.
The grass was leaning on the winds arms, letting it caress it’s back, creating a soft sound.
Use "its", that shows ownership, "it's" is a contraction of "it is" or "it has".
Four pony stood at the Great Entrance and one of them raised his hoof, signaling her to stop, which she did.
I am pretty sure I wasn't standing there. "pony" should be "ponies".
“Pardon our rudeness Pri-“
When a speaker is cut off an em dash is used. To make one hold the "Alt" key and type in "0151" and release "Alt".
“It’s strange.” Said the Princess. “After all those years I still remember her face.
"Said the Princess." is not a complete sentence. The period in the dialog should be made a comma, like this: "It's strange," said the Princess.
“I remember them too.” She answered suddenly.
Same as before, though "She answered suddenly" can stand alone as a sentence. It is customary to have dialog separated from a dialog tag with a comma; dialog tags being words like: said, questioned, spoke, answered, etc. I also think "spoke" would be better instead of "answered" since no question was really posed.
“Please my Prized Student. Trust me.” She pleaded.
Again, period should be a comma: "[...] Trust me," she pleaded.
And don’t hold on to her hoof to strongly.
"to" should be "too".
Your English is very good, only things I have noticed are little typos or issues with grammar that confuse a lot of native English users.
8725574 Hello! I edited (hopefully correct) everything you suggested, except the cut off part, because my laptop is refusing to cooperate and does nothing >< Thank you for your help!
Man, the concept for this sounds so good, but I can barely get past each paragraph without thinking about all the changes i would make to make it sound and flow better. It's too distracting to be enjoyable.
8920443 So Sorry >< I feel so bad about not being to tell this story the way it deserves. I have like a huge epic narration in my head in my own language, and then I have so many trouble with translating that it barely leaves anything enjoyable. T.T
You had my curiosity, but now you have my attention....
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Thank you so much! I hope I will not disappoint you!
How much of a grammar Nazi do you need i see misspells and undecided ends to sentences but i hesitate to complain because i used spellcheck on 11 words so far and i suck at grimmer on my own this is my first comment on this site so pleas tell me the proper way to inform you of the needed alterations hind site is after all perfect, and don't ask for punctuation advise as you can see i don't write much but i read too much. written at 11:26 2/8/18
8721356
usually on this site, most just quote and then state the correction, along with an optional pleasantry such as "I hope this helps" or something along those lines.
if it's something people make a mistake on quite often such as "to, two, and too" you might point the general rules.
as long as you're not rude, most don't mind the help.
8721356
I would appreciate the help in any form. If you take your time to write it down for me the least I can do is correct them and thank you^^
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big
on a hill
Interesting...
The stallion nodded hesitantly, then handed her a paper, so she can verify her presence between the palace walls and stepped away from her way, need to chose ether (out of her way) or (away from her) if you wont to express his subconscious acceptances to authority I would suggest adding (a respectful distance) before either choice as for the other things I see you got them I am enjoying your work so ill move on.
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Thank you for your implications, I used them ! :D
you need an editor- bid city, stood in a hill, I shouldn't be thinking about how many errors there are before the end of the second paragraph.
You also struggle a lot with tell instead of showing, which makes it very hard to believe things you tell us. You drop details that could make the story interesting, and then move on without giving them the attention they deserve.
Use "its", that shows ownership, "it's" is a contraction of "it is" or "it has".
I am pretty sure I wasn't standing there.
"pony" should be "ponies".
When a speaker is cut off an em dash is used. To make one hold the "Alt" key and type in "0151" and release "Alt".
"Said the Princess." is not a complete sentence. The period in the dialog should be made a comma, like this:
"It's strange," said the Princess.
Same as before, though "She answered suddenly" can stand alone as a sentence. It is customary to have dialog separated from a dialog tag with a comma; dialog tags being words like: said, questioned, spoke, answered, etc. I also think "spoke" would be better instead of "answered" since no question was really posed.
Again, period should be a comma: "[...] Trust me," she pleaded.
8725574
Hello! I edited (hopefully correct) everything you suggested, except the cut off part, because my laptop is refusing to cooperate and does nothing >< Thank you for your help!
Man, the concept for this sounds so good, but I can barely get past each paragraph without thinking about all the changes i would make to make it sound and flow better. It's too distracting to be enjoyable.
8920443
So Sorry >< I feel so bad about not being to tell this story the way it deserves. I have like a huge epic narration in my head in my own language, and then I have so many trouble with translating that it barely leaves anything enjoyable. T.T