A ghoul in a world he no longer recognises. A unicorn with a secret none can know. A mare with a troubled past. A legendary treasure. What good comes from waking the dead?
Seeing a story as well written as this have a bad habit of ruining my mood since I know that no matter how hard I try will I never be able to write anything like it, but it is nice knowing that my pre-reader eyes are as sharp as ever and that my nitpicking can help polish even a story like this so it shines even brighter.
Nitpicks "it was going to take use the better part of a day to get to Hoofbeats." Delete e "Any information about this could blah, blah, blah.." Your ellipse lacks a period.
Seeing a story as well written as this have a bad habit of ruining my mood since I know that no matter how hard I try will I never be able to write anything like it, but it is nice knowing that my pre-reader eyes are as sharp as ever and that my nitpicking can help polish even a story like this so it shines even brighter.
Nitpicks
"it was going to take use the better part of a day to get to Hoofbeats." Delete e
"Any information about this could blah, blah, blah.." Your ellipse lacks a period.