A ghoul in a world he no longer recognises. A unicorn with a secret none can know. A mare with a troubled past. A legendary treasure. What good comes from waking the dead?
Seems like shit are about to hit the fan and some old dirty laundry will be aired! Are always looking forward to chapters like this, the ones that hint at what kind of things Equestria did parving the road to hell with their good intentions.
Nitpicks: "it was powerful enough to punch through light zebra tank. " Sounds a bit weird to me, I would say either put a plural s on the end, or a singular a in front of it. " My eyes opened faster when I felt some thing metal fastened around it." pretty sure that it should just be a single word. "slavers milled to the cages firing shots to keep them penned it." should it not be in?
So as a new habit of mine... FIRST!
Seems like shit are about to hit the fan and some old dirty laundry will be aired! Are always looking forward to chapters like this, the ones that hint at what kind of things Equestria did parving the road to hell with their good intentions.
Nitpicks:
"it was powerful enough to punch through light zebra tank. " Sounds a bit weird to me, I would say either put a plural s on the end, or a singular a in front of it.
" My eyes opened faster when I felt some thing metal fastened around it." pretty sure that it should just be a single word.
"slavers milled to the cages firing shots to keep them penned it." should it not be in?