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MintCakeWrites


Writer, Reader, Teacher, Dad Joke-r, Shitposter

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How do I know this story won't die after only one chapter?

On my coatless skin.

This was a pleasant surprise. Usually when this type of situation happens there's some kind of radiation shielding in play. Can't wait to see where this story goes.

Well, this actually might be interesting. Think I'll give it a go.

Damn Hard Copy can sure hold his own in a firefight, well done the combat with Septic was a treat.

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Glad you enjoyed it! This was a doozy of a chapter to write, and I do enjoy one on one combat scenes. CQC is always more interesting than pot shots fired from a distance.

Poor Hard, he'll go psycho at this rate, hope his fun mode and serious mode never meet at the same time.

I have become lazy and a fan of shorter chapters, but I am glad that I picked this one up! Lovely writing, descriptions are top notch, and a new and original take on it all, what's not to like?

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" I love the daring knights who rescue the prince" Prince? Sorry what... MLP is all about the princesses!

Seeing a story as well written as this have a bad habit of ruining my mood since I know that no matter how hard I try will I never be able to write anything like it, but it is nice knowing that my pre-reader eyes are as sharp as ever and that my nitpicking can help polish even a story like this so it shines even brighter.

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"it was going to take use the better part of a day to get to Hoofbeats." Delete e
"Any information about this could blah, blah, blah.." Your ellipse lacks a period.

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Thank you kindly for the nitpicking! Any help to polish this is greatly appreciated!

As for "knights who resuce the prince" - who do you think is doing the rescuing? :rainbowwild:

Side note, don't let it get you down! I don't want people discouraged because of my writing, it's the exact opposite of why I write ><

A wild wasteland story? Welp you had my curiosity, but now you have my full attention.

GASP! You do actually follow the NV formula of a perk every other level instead of all of the other games! The nerddom have been doubled!

I hate this moment when I have caught up with a story that I have fallen in love with more than anything else... But it seems that this story is still in its infancy and growing quickly, so that is a nice change of pace compared to some of the other stories on my list that haven't been updated in the 2 years that I have been away from this site.

I know that it dosn't mean much, but had you more nitpicks for me to pick at would I have offered myself as a pre-reader to get a snoop in on your next chapters before the rest get them, but you seem to have things under control and I can honestly not really see how I could be able to polish on this story beside sending positive vibes with each and every comment that I write.

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"She struggled to remove the belt until the explosions tore from her to pieces." Maybe is it my Danish brain, but I can't see what the from are doing here.

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I'm glad you're enjoying it! I'm always up for pre-readers for help catching the little things, though due to my location g-docs isn't an option annoyingly.

Hope I keep up to your standards, and thank you for reading!

Keep up to your standards he say and upload a chapter the day after I have caught up with the story, what nerve! Its an advice that I have given a few others, so I will share it with you as well. Instead of uploading your chapters when they are done, try to put them up on a schedule, with your chapter lengths would I say one a month would be a good pace. That way do you not scare potential new readers away with your productivity, and believe you me I have been scared away from stories, feeling that I never would be able to catch up with them. Another good thing about the backlog is that if shit hits the fan, and it will at some point, do you have something to fall back on, and if you ever want to change a few details and such because you come up with a better idea is it easier to change in unpublished chapters than some that already have been shared. Win-win-win all around would I say!

Fuck you... Fuck you on the horn of Luna, to the moon and back again for making that song stuck in my brain! No amount of wasteland brain bleach, no megaspell of mental health regeneration, will cure me from that tune!

“Thanks for the vote of confidence, Two, but this is dictatorship, not a democracy,”

Overstallion Doom supports this dictatorship, him running his own free dictatorship back at home Stable!

"Be awesome!", that line have been used in so many stories by now, the statuette been given like a dozen times in the stories that I have read, and people trying to make them into potions to drink and what not... And yet none have caught the amazing spirit of the figures as you have, adding a backside to a too shining medal. What you just did in this chapter... now that is what lifts this story over so many others, that I saw the most of this chapter almost animated in my head as a shortmovie is another and way way smaller detail that we shouldn't talk too much about thou.

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" hunting for me my saviour but found no-one new in the room." Delete
" I think we should stop shooting at each other and atthe pricks we should be shooting at," At the

So something that hit me, it seems that I am one of your few readers on this story, which is really odd when one think about the high quality that you are running here, so if you are interested in some more traffic for your story would I like to suggest a few advises.

Not many know if, but FoE does actually have a Reddit thread, and not only are self exposure allowed, you are even allowed to make a new post with every chapter update, meaning that you have a lot of changes to catch peoples eyes!

We do also have our Wiki, I know that it pulled in a lot of trafic in the olden golden days, but don't really know how many there are using it right now. But making a few pages about the story, doing a short summery about the chars and such never hurt anyone.

Something that have helped me spread my name around is... well what I am doing right now, reading stories and then writing comments there are relevant. Not only do writers love feedback, you should know that, but its not that hard to get others to agree to share ones story in a blog or an author note if one are willing to offer up the same. Also a simple thing as commenting on the FoE forums in here will get you on the radar, even when you don't try to promote your own story but are just chit chatting with other people.

You properly knew a lot of what I have just written down, but hey it never hurts to say it again.

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" one the most talented I have ever met" Missing an "of"
" as if she were weeping to hard." I am pretty sure it should be too
"With a heave, we opened the stuck draw and were greeted with a decent collection of illicit substances." Drawer?

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Don’t forget about the Facebook group. I’ve been doing stuff on there for some time and I feel it’s help in some cases.

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Thank you both for the suggestions! There is now a wiki page which will be updated as things progress, and I have posted a few chapter to Reddit already. Unfortunately, due to China living, Facebook is not an option right now.

Either way, thank you both for reading!

This chapter. :facehoof: :twilightsheepish: Dear god, this is what Fallout is all about! More, sir! :flutterrage: Seriously though, this is some good stuff. This chapter really is a microcosm of everything good about Fallout.

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Thank you for the praise, I hope the rest of the story holds up too!

"I just spent the time watching her do all the things I missed seeing her door" What an odd typo

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Good catch, I blame rewriting paragraphs at the last minute

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Just finished catching up. It does. The downside is that now I’ve got literary blue balls.

So as a new habit of mine... FIRST!

Seems like shit are about to hit the fan and some old dirty laundry will be aired! Are always looking forward to chapters like this, the ones that hint at what kind of things Equestria did parving the road to hell with their good intentions.

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"it was powerful enough to punch through light zebra tank. " Sounds a bit weird to me, I would say either put a plural s on the end, or a singular a in front of it.
" My eyes opened faster when I felt some thing metal fastened around it." pretty sure that it should just be a single word.
"slavers milled to the cages firing shots to keep them penned it." should it not be in?

Why does the middle guy in the cover art look like a cross between Agent Smith and Arnold Wesker?

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He is an "agent" of sorts, so I wanted business attire for him. Admittedly had to search up who Arnold Wesker was and got an English Dramatist and a DC villain as two responses... not seeing the connection there unfortunately!

Good story and work. Looking forward to the next update.

I wonder if this will ever update

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