Spike was a very interesting dragon. He was kind, he was caring, he was loving, and he was sweet. Now though he seemed dull. Empty if you will. Instead of being the vibrant cheerful young dragon everypony knew him to be he chose to be eerily calm. Refined. He walked everywhere and almost never spoke. This of course led Twilight to worry.
You may want to try break up these sentences, really use the space of the page seeing as this doesn’t read like a paragraph.
"Well young Spike... we were wanting to know about our first encounter... when you summoned your weapon to our neck we felt as if you drew your power from us... we eant to know if you did to be honest, so... did you?"
Pointing out a spelling error, also earlier in the second paragraph you need to capitalize Nightmare Moon.
You may want to try break up these sentences, really use the space of the page seeing as this doesn’t read like a paragraph.
Pointing out a spelling error, also earlier in the second paragraph you need to capitalize Nightmare Moon.
a game of chess will be relaxing
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Thanks for pointing that stuff out. I'll be sure to correct it. :3