Pretty clean and well written, no gammar or spelling mistakes that I could find. Just something on how the conversation was written.
Generally when it comes to conversations you would connected the quoted words with the following action such as:
“I am say this” he said bluntly.
However, the separations I see here between the quotes and the following actions is very nice, adding a bit to the mood. The above way of doing things simply helps with the flow of ge conversation, but what I’ve seen in this chapter is perfectly fine for the setting and tone of the conversation.
I'm going to assume this is related to Bloodborne.
Pretty clean and well written, no gammar or spelling mistakes that I could find. Just something on how the conversation was written.
Generally when it comes to conversations you would connected the quoted words with the following action such as:
“I am say this” he said bluntly.
However, the separations I see here between the quotes and the following actions is very nice, adding a bit to the mood. The above way of doing things simply helps with the flow of ge conversation, but what I’ve seen in this chapter is perfectly fine for the setting and tone of the conversation.
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Correct!