Come on dude... Your having a very serious scene between Twi and Cadence then you suddenly say "magic pony wizard". I couldn't stop laugh for a solid ten minutes.

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sorry not sorry :P
one of my favorite tropes in more serious equestria girls fics is the part where sunset comes out as an extradimensional magic horse who's best friends with a fantasy princess. we gotta remember the source material, after all ;)
fractured sunlight is honestly my favorite one that does that, and it's plenty serious too

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I was just kidding around though that line did make me laugh hard. Can't wait for next chapter but I was kinda hoping to see how Twi's parents interact with there talking dog. They still freaked out about that or do you think they've gotten used to it by now.

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This is a while after they got used to that bit. It's a plot point that's going to be implemented in a story that takes place earlier in the continuity that I just haven't gotten to yet.

Very interesting story thus far, with an interesting mix of cynical narration and admittedly rather depressing themes.

One thing that I might be missing, though: who exactly is doing the self-harm? I know Midnight threatened Twilight with the pizza cutter, and during the shower scene it's at least indicated that Midnight has an influence, but one thing early on really stuck out to me:

It isn't even a problem, she double and triple checked her research on where to cut so as not to cause any permanent lasting damage to any arteries or tendons or anything. It was something that would surely just go away given enough time.

This seems to suggest that Twilight has more agency than we might think when she cuts herself. How much of it is Midnight? Is this even about magic any more? There's a brief mention of schizophrenia, so who's to say that this Midnight isn't just a projection inside of her head as opposed to a lingering remnant of Twilight's original experiment? What exactly are we dealing with?

Good job, you’ve got me concerned about the mental wellbeing of a fictional character. I'm not even hopeful for a “happy ending”, I'm just intrigued as to where this is going to go, and how and when Twilight's feelings are going to boil over.

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Thank you for your comment ^.^ I'm glad you're interested.

You are asking very good questions here, and your head is most certainly in the right place. You're thinking about exactly what I want you to be thinking about :D and though I'm not gonna be providing any answers because ~spoilers~, I will say that every single thing you just asked will most certainly be addressed later on :3

This is good, but it has all these other connected stories that aren't finished either. Hope to see more soon.

I am really loving this. The way you made Midnight Sparkle as a semi-corporeal being in the way that she's interacting with Twilight is genius. This has made my tracking list and earned a thumbs up. I can't wait for more.

'Emotionally flat'?

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Thine wish hast been granted, and the other fics are certainly on their way to completion.

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Thank you ^.^ it's an idea that I'm proud of and I've got a few ways to implement her in ways that I'll hope you appreciate.

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Emotionally flat means that nothing is felt intensely. No happiness, no sadness, no anger, just a kind of fog of apathy and general misery.

And with that, Midnight went into the closet, and shut the door behind her.

I have fond memories of my closet (literal closet not the other one) I miss it.

“Oh, it was just fine,” he answered. “They got us here, with flying colors!”

Dad jokes...the bane of every child's existence