8841456 oh maybe the other dragon could be more symbolic like its a toy dragon and he explains what dragons mean in this world and how they can represent look at fafnirs lore for example of what will happen if she isnt careful
The text itself needs some serious proofreading. I copied the first three paragraphs into google docs and edited them as I would any other English text. The errors are so numerous that I didn't see a single sentence without any until the last paragraph. In particular, watch out for sentence fragments (remember sentences need both a subject and a verb), and switching between past and present tense. You seem to love writing in present perfect, which makes many sentences hard to write and can be extremely confusing to read. I suggest switching your entire story into past tense.
Bight is a noun. It's a geography term for a bend or curve of land on a coastline, a body of water within a bend of land that's shallower than a sound or a harbor. ... Bite is a noun, meaning a portion of food a person can remove from their fork or a chunk of food using their mouth.
Took a bite and with a big smile on my face I comprehended that it tasted amazing.
Thank you for all this but wouldn't be easy to send it all at once in a mail message? You don't need to spam the messages here It will be simple if you did it all at once in mail.
So yes please send it through mail doing so will make it easy to hunt all this down.
then all of a sudden a salamance shows up
naaa im joshing ya or am I?
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LOL
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tho it would be cool if he met another uman turned dragon that gave into their instincts and became nothing more then a monster from myths
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Yeah she would have If Lyra didn't show up. Thanks to Lyra she dosen't turn into a monster.
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oh maybe the other dragon could be more symbolic like its a toy dragon and he explains what dragons mean in this world and how they can represent look at fafnirs lore for example of what will happen if she isnt careful
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Maybe I already have the sequel in the works. This one is finished now just needs to be edited.
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fair enough
Fun read but I noticed some minor errors, mostly capitalizing and punctuation errors.
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Eh at least it's not crazy bad like it was. Thank you though if I can find those I will fix them.
Your idea is awesome. I love dragons.
But.
The text itself needs some serious proofreading. I copied the first three paragraphs into google docs and edited them as I would any other English text. The errors are so numerous that I didn't see a single sentence without any until the last paragraph. In particular, watch out for sentence fragments (remember sentences need both a subject and a verb), and switching between past and present tense. You seem to love writing in present perfect, which makes many sentences hard to write and can be extremely confusing to read. I suggest switching your entire story into past tense.
You can take a look at what I mean on google docs: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Aqu55lYUezScxs5DQLQ_7K8iuBlPtet5dGcT05nTIM4/edit?usp=sharing
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Alright thank you very much. I will take a hard look.
She has always been far (to) brave.
She has always been far too brave.
Every time I ask you give me some strange looks.
Every time I ask you about that subject, you give me some strange looks.
But (All i) am searching for now is more gas.
But all I am searching for now is more gas.
One of the books war and peace.
One of the books is War and Peace by Leo Tolstoy.
So I didn't need (anymore gas since I didn't have anymore Gas) cans.
So I didn't need any more gas since I didn't have any more empty gas cans.
Maybe I have been (to) hard on her.
Maybe I have been too hard on her.
Walking past the jewellery display and case. Suddenly stopping turning around looking at all the rings
While walking past the jewellery display case, I suddenly stopped and then turned around looking at all the rings.
Driving to (Gillette so) I can get to (south) Dakota.
Driving to Gillette was necessary, so I can get to South Dakota.
I wish (Lyra came) with me.
I wish Lyra had come with me.
It's going to be (along trek) I'm unsure what to (think what) to do.
It's going to be a long trek. I'm unsure what to think, what to do.
Took a (bight) it tasted amazing.
Bight is a noun. It's a geography term for a bend or curve of land on a coastline, a body of water within a bend of land that's shallower than a sound or a harbor. ... Bite is a noun, meaning a portion of food a person can remove from their fork or a chunk of food using their mouth.
Took a bite and with a big smile on my face I comprehended that it tasted amazing.
Well (i) do think of (her my) friend.
Well I do think of her as my friend.
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Thank you for all this but wouldn't be easy to send it all at once in a mail message? You don't need to spam the messages here It will be simple if you did it all at once in mail.
So yes please send it through mail doing so will make it easy to hunt all this down.