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They really do need to work on their containment protocols for stuff like that.
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Well remember it's not exactly an established and well planned setup. It's put hurriedly together under pressure to do a job noone has ever had to do before. Mistakes will be made.
_____I've been waiting some time for this.
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Hey! Good to see you here :)
https://www.fimfiction.net/group/211585/reviewers-cafe/thread/308771/reviews#comment/6146147
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The dumbest of those criticisms was the apparent "grammar issues". It's literally flawless.
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Thank you!
I do notice a lack of any examples whatsoever as well...
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Not entirely sure about that review myself... Their own grammar was lacking.
As for the stakes comment, I can see you've set it up so that the stakes from the very first chapter are insanely high, you have a high risk situation with contained creatures that can and will get out from time to time as the security teams figure out how to contain them better, you have X amount of people and ponies crammed in there all at risk of death at any time. Maybe the stakes aren't world ending but I say you've got a high tension scenario right off the bat there.